Black Poetry : Remembering

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  1. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hurt my heart when
    she told me
    she loved me
    Thought she would
    never leave me
    but ya see
    My boy told me
    how she engulfed
    in lustful sin
    with my friend
    then she come
    telling me how
    she talked with God
    and he cleansed
    within
    but Jody...
    That **** Jody
    dropped a dime
    on her mind
    now they interwine
    Man....
    I loved and served
    her like a true man
    would
    Honestly and Faithfully
    I never understood
    how I committed my
    heart
    from the start
    and now
    we're far apart
    Why Lord?
    am I left here
    dealing
    with
    my own feeling
    of Lost love
    remembering
    times of when
    she would talk
    to me
    silently
    whispering
    sweet
    words of Love
    fiercly but gently
    easing the tension
    within me
    definitly...
    Remembering when
    I'd get in a little
    trouble and I
    could come
    to her torn
    and broken
    Lost in the ways
    of man
    and she'd take
    my hand
    I'm still...
    remembering those
    long nights
    touching
    rubbing
    sucking
    while inducing
    sensual sensations
    of pleasure
    beyond measures
    making me high off
    the love we made
    ****!
    Now she's swayed
    Could she have
    gotten tired
    and stop loving me?
    Was it me?
    I pray
    Praying for the
    Lord to come
    carry me away
    So I lay
    in bed holding
    myself
    waiting for another day
    Remembering....
     
  2. MsBerry_98

    MsBerry_98 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awwwww....

    This is a great piece, but oh so sad. You done made my heart hurt. But, I guess that's what good poetry does... insight emotion. You've done it well.
     
  3. Rashad

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    Especially when I had to dig hard, sis

    This was tough
    I was try'n to
    go another way
    with this but
    it came out this
    way
    Thanks for reading.
    and Tell your heart it's
    all good
     
  4. Danilyn

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    Where did this lil ditty come from?

    I'm with MsBerry... great piece but very sad. Don't tell me Jody got yo girl!!! It's been a pleasure watching your talent just grow and grow. I'm proud of you sweetie!!! But errrr ahhh... I'm still wonderin what inspired this heah if you know what I'm sayin!!!!
    Love ya, boo!
     
  5. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gurrrl....

    I'd have to tell u
    at some other time
    It's kind of embarrassing
    Nuth'n but Love fo ya boo
    Can u feel me!
    and thanks for reading:heart:
     
  6. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rashad.


    ...****! now you got me remembering!! :D

    this was melancholy... but hey! i loved the flow of it...
    & speaking of flow... sometimes you start out wanting
    to write one thing & end up wit sumthin' total-ly
    different... (LOL)... but just continue to let the flow lead
    ...you follow... & you cain't go wrong! :)

    :heart:
    SunShyne~
     
  7. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bet dat GA

    Thanks for checking a brutha out.
    Much Love to ya poet.:toast:
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh Rashad!

    This heah piece gots a lil'bit of errythang all roll'd up in one. I'm feeling your vibe poet. You been holding out on us. Keep'em com'n ;)

    Poetically Turn'd Out
    CCBSKYN
     
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    rashad..this piece is a very well written piece of sweet melancholy. i always love to read pieces like this one because it's jus so much feelin' that i can c deep from within that jus flos. i'm lovin' it! keep on scribin'...as i continue to watch.

    ~~~chaptersoflove~~~
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyght as hell

    two thumbs up @ ya coz u on da mark
    lovin dis here.....:D
     
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