Black Poetry : Redemption

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  1. rymjack5

    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All I have to offer
    a thought, a poem, a prayer.

    Standing alone
    I clench the blood-steeped handle
    of the hatchet
    that cleft my soul in twain.

    And there was light
    to be found in the darkness.

    Though the gallow still awaits--

    begging the question.

    Alone in a world of shadows
    corrupted--on these four walls
    I pound out the lines of my soul.

    And there you stood
    innocent, divine, uncorrupted.

    Here I stand
    gazing out
    over the mob
    this sea of wrath.

    Then the floor gave way
    I dropped--

    my being ascended
    cleft--it arrived on two paths
    in the mist
    with a sunshine blessing
    I finally became whole once again.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow ......u really did it up here
    and yes whole again indeed
    i like dis piece
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this
    your deep in thought and
    know how to place it together to all fit right..
     
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    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you RICH!!!
    Thank you mzblkangel!!!!
    I have never received such a warm WELCOME
    I have never received such ENCOURAGEMENT and SUPPORT
    as you all have been so gracious to provide.
    THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    I AM GRATEFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    we are greatful that u are here sharing such gifted art
    ya pen is mighty and strong .....lovin ya flava.
     
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    Ah rymjack, you create such an odyssey with every line. I am such a fan of yours you don't even know.
     
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    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you gempis!!! Your acknowledgement and kind words give me a sense of joy and fulfillment. I am honored and grateful.
    THANK YOU!!!
     
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    This was very thoughtful and had good imagery. Nice write.
     
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    Wow.........rymjack5

    Your on the path to becoming a favorite...



    And there you stood
    innocent, divine, uncorrupted.

    Here I stand
    gazing out
    over the mob
    this sea of wrath.

    Then the floor gave way
    I dropped--

    my being ascended
    cleft--it arrived on two paths
    in the mist
    with a sunshine blessing
    I finally became whole once again.


    wow!
     
  10. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "All I have to offer
    a thought, a poem, a prayer. "

    WHOA...and yet this is SO much to offer :)
    yeah u sho is hot LoL :)
     
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