Black Poetry : Redemption: The Deliverance

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Kori, Oct 17, 2004.

  1. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    “ya creativity is trapped in[…] you setting up barriers due to ya constant insecurities.”
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    Infinite insecurity of my verbal ability
    Leads me to question my mental stability
    Fear of rejection by those I look upon
    As gifts to written word, literal phenomenons
    Cautious with my choice of diction
    For fear of developing narrative addiction
    Prose like hoes: loose with oral tools
    Mind wide-open leaking rhetoric jewels
    Tryna hold my mental in physical embraces
    Containing cerebral power, hiding poetic faces
    My hypersensitive nature hardens and rises
    Above criticism hidden in ‘hot drop’ disguises
    Honesty would lead to elevation of skill
    Can’t milk a quality reply if posters lack will
    I had once refused writing large quantities
    For lack of confidence in my poetic qualities
    Held my self to the standards and styles of others
    Ignorant to the uniqueness of each sister and brother
    Its ain’t the post numbers that intimidate
    It’s a heart on paper and the calling to alliterate
    I crave to free myself through figurative expression
    But I’d become a victim of my own mental oppression
    Caught up by an impending elegiac depression
    Now I’m ready to spit hot, lyrically enlightening by fire
    Droppin knowledge bombs to my heart’s heightened desire
    Be ready for elevation and take heed to my words
    I’m painting the surface of ya soul so gods can observe
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeah, you be ret, aiight, my friend - cause this is tight!! Flow on, please flow on. :weights:
     
  3. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for the reply!!! I appreciate the love.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    surely within ur be at the goodness of it this was well felt
    tyte write
     
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    I would believe that someone with your skills would have the problem of too much poetic prose entering the brain at one time...Your phrasing is so crisp and vibrant. Flow on poet.
     
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    If this coming out party is any indication of the talent that is emerging then greatness has arrived.
     
  7. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for your replies...and yes this is definitely a sign. BE ON THE LOOKOUT for Kori. :)
     
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