Black Poetry : Redemption: The Continuance

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Kori, Jan 28, 2005.

  1. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fkcu writing for masses, I scribe to free me now
    From ignorant perceptions of who I might be now
    My goal is to verbally sway a mis-educated public's opinion
    By allowing them to bear witness to the growth of my poetic dominion
    My poetic progress will not be stifled by wannabe's meager attempts 'out-express' me
    Focus on art only, for the desire to hold others down will always suppress thee
    I stay close minded to the close minded: They'll not be privy to my prolific thoughts
    Too preoccupied to brace themselves for elevation by real poets so faithfully sought
    Minds easily captured in cliches and bound by redundancy of 3-letter rhyme schemes
    To busy reading between the lines to decipher what the lines mean
    He and she will never be able to subdue the creativity that runs so free in me
    And try as they might no, falsified poet will deny me of my lyrical vitality
    Ample amounts of alliteration alleviate my writer's angst amplified
    Each and every elaborate stage of elevation in my words is exemplified
    Through assonance, metaphors, and personification, poetry I contrive
    Utilizing literary techniques with syllabled lines five seven and five
    My pen engraves life
    Personifies emotions
    Conveys strength of minds


    Self searching through verbs
    Enjabed upon pen and pad
    Seek and you shall find

    That there are perpetrators seeking recognition through imitating this expression
    Seeking in thesauruses a means to contradict such obvious verbal regression
    As opposed to composing for expansion, they spit to spite truth
    Less reality leaks from their pens then a fraction of haiku
    Then there are those who rummage through words pursuing the essence of their souls
    In articulating sentiments, real poets search for self-resurgence as wholes
    I consider myself belonging to the latter group that writes for sense of self
    Choosing to ignore the abundance of emotionless attention seeking works left
    I'm sick as hell with the words, vomiting knowledge unheard,
    Poetry be me my fill, returning for firsts, seconds, and thirds
    In the likes of a crew named Uhuru, I'm bound to be guvu*
    Defecating on ya bitten works, flushing yo bars like they doodoo
    I reject perpetration and pose myself as a poet in aspiration
    I'm on edacious verbal quests: uncensored and undefinable is my destination
    As long as I posess a mind there'll be un-traveled poetic venues
    And my journey across blue shores and white oceans shall continue

    *guvu is a word meaning powerful in kiswahili
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    ok..ok...this was a great..."where i'm at piece"...
    keep flexing the styles...and flushing bars like doodoo...lol
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your mind screams volumes.

    Completely diggin' this.

    Peace.
     
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    MANASIAC Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a Real Example of a MADDRAPPER.

    Thank you for feeding me

    Because yo style is poetical, entertaining and percise like the nutcracker

    You spin lyircal peace and harmony

    Not jumbled up rhymes that waste time

    Bout time we got someone who could flow

    This piece has really touched my mind
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte poetic flow and redemption
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight scribe likes this read flow head on....Angel
     
  7. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks you all. Im glad to be able to share my pieces with you as I grow and continue in writing
    Actually, I've eben here a while, just becoming more active now that we have the critique forum
     
  8. Khasm13

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    bring any poem over to the critique forum poet...
    we are bout to get our growth on....:heart:

    one love
    khasm
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Writing for a sense of self...so much to gain in that. Thought provoking piece poet, flow on.
     
  10. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the replies :D
    And Khasm, Im :jump: happy just thinking about getting honest critique on my work.
     
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