Black Poetry : RED

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm not sure if this makes much sense but, bear with me, I know the mood is dark...


    Did you know
    that the color of truth is red?
    It's true.....
    Red lingers in my head
    I try to think of other colors
    but all that appears is....RED
    I used to see a rainbow
    I'd rather behold those hues instead,
    but I can't
    I keep seeing red
    I hope you don't misread me
    cause I'd hate to be misread
    And I realize that red can be
    beautiful, like a rose
    each petal so delicate
    the design and bouquet
    so delightfully intricate
    *sigh*
    Yes, but I can also see
    the red blood coursing thru
    my veins, straining to be pumped
    in and out of a tired heart, can you
    see it? I can, the RED blood
    supply trying to flow to my brain
    my mind trying to receive some sensory
    stimulation before it goes.....insane
    Some say the color of death is black
    but no, I say, it's red
    RED I said
    As I sit and watch the blood just
    slowly ooze out of my soul
    It's creeping...
    c r e e p i n g.....
    s e e p i n g....
    Until I'm no longer whole
    Until I am completely drained
    null and void
    an entire life
    destroyed
    And all that is left
    All that will remain
    Is a blood stain
    that is
    RED
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    RED RED REDDDDDDDDDDD!!!
    dis was deeply felt sis.........
    i can river down the stream of dis
     
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    tight scribe...flow on.....
     
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    Ahhhh! Very unique and clever!

    I love how you layed this!!!!!
    Keep it comming Sis!!!!!!
     
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    I know I've said this before, sister, but I adore how your mind works. Mining the concept and bringing it to full bloom. Mad props for this, and much love.
     
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    youre not misread sista :) the same red that fuels many passions often stirs into the recesses of our mind with tingling sensations of....RED REDDD REDDDDDD frustration confusion...whateva the case may be...cause its not always roses and lipstick...thas the real :) i can dig it my sista indeed :read:
     
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    Rich, thank you for letting me know that you caught the feel of this. Appreciated.
    Thank you for the support blkangel on this.
    Your praise means a lot Purplemoons, thanks so much.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So nice to know you can appreciate the way my mind works gempis, it's sort of tricky sometimes...lol....thank you sis.
    What you said triniti, what you said....exactly. Thank you for letting me know this wasn't too avant garde, and for the props on this.
     
  9. 7thPoet

    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wanted you to know that after I read
    Red
    it really went to my head
    that's why I used this color instead


    of blue;)

    i always enjoy your poems...
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your response made me smile 7thPoet, thank you for that.