Black Poetry : Receptive Moments

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HODEE, Oct 20, 2009.

  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Receptive moments​

    Relationship starts
    Build up a tolerance
    The heart is now apart

    Transmission of affection
    Is the message getting through?

    Unlimited possibilities
    Once the average rise
    The desire must be maintained
    To keep up this high.

    If ever things change
    The passion is gone
    The withdrawal, the sickness
    The long nights alone

    Like a drug habit addiction
    Hard to kick
    So be ready if you consider
    Don't enter inadequately equipped
    Diving into a relationship
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Hodee...

    Your piece transmits a great message and I enjoyed receiving it. I love the last verse it drives the others home. Also your title is very attractive... it alone inspires me to write. Thanks for sharing with us!


    feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    something we should take note on , you said it best and wit a billboard special
     
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