Black Poetry : Reborn

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  1. Manchid

    Manchid Member MEMBER

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    Unable to comprehend this feeling
    I write. Scribing the focus that is
    your heart. Knowing my fears
    controlling my future I write. Laying
    on the gentle blankets of your
    soul I find my life torn. Screaming
    to be reborn. Reborn a day younger
    for I was born yesterday but you
    got to understand I stayed up all
    night. So I digress into realization
    that this 24 hour life has only felt
    the wrath of a woman's pain and
    strife. I was reborn out of the ashes
    of scorched love to find your
    beautiful eyes staring down on mine.
    Unable to comprehend you seeing
    me...you meeting me. I begin to lose
    my mind. Confusingly I reluctantly
    opened my past up to you trying to
    keep you away from this relationship
    you diligently pursue. Within this
    spiritual love in which we lay naked
    in revealing our truths. You open up
    your heart leaving me to drown from
    its deepness... its vastness. In tuned
    with my heart you you comprehend
    my souls weakness. In tuned with my
    love for you my soul becomes
    reconstructed leaving me utterly speechless...
    This soulful awareness leaves us in a
    place where stress fades and our
    relationship is blessed. Unpresumptuously
    you search my soul shedding light to
    its deep scars. So slowly you heal them
    with your sensitivity and in doing so
    released my enslaved emotions from
    its bars. Letting our emotions grow we
    fall within leaving me scared of being
    burned by its radiant glow. You
    know to much... leading me to back
    away from your touch. Knowing my
    pain you softly approach again. But
    but your words put my heart at ease...
    lets just go with the flow. Unaware that
    flow would move so fast we do. So we
    move at this incredible speed allowing
    me to realize that the beauty of this
    relationship is you. Because without
    you there is no we and without we the
    reborn me could not be...So you is me.
    Gently allowing my soul to cry old tears.
    And in the dark I cry tears of love
    wondering dreading this loves end. Not
    realizing that well it has just begin. So
    uncontrollably another day ends.
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Manchid...this was a spiraling piece...
    that swept me into the undercurrent of
    emotion, passion, completion and the rebirth
    of your utterances of love...

    Absolutely Wonderful Peace... :toast:


    oooooooooooo
     
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    I particularly liked these lines:
    "Laying on the gentle blankets of your
    soul I find my life torn. Screaming
    to be reborn. Reborn a day younger
    for I was born yesterday but you
    got to understand I stayed up all
    night. So I digress into realization
    that this 24 hour life has only felt
    the wrath of a woman's pain and
    strife."
    But, as a whole this piece just mesmerized me into that feeling of being reborn in and of love. Wonderfully written.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 awesome flowing here u created a masterpiece
     
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    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a way to burst onto the scene. This was beautiful, poet :wave:
     
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    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aww...



    this kept my breath......

    and brought back old tears










    jee.....
    welcome poet :grouphug:


    Are you new around here?





    Youre good man..




    we defenatly want more..





    Lovelibertylady:heart:
     
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