Black Poetry : Reality Check

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by krazelyricks, Jul 2, 2003.

  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I've seen people steal
    to pay a bill
    I've seen people kill
    then take a seat to chill
    I've seen young black sistas become whores
    because the money they make is not enough they need more
    I've seen young black brothas drop out to hussel
    Don't like their girl so they curse her
    I've seen one block of gov't cheese passed along a family that was poor
    Got seven children they need more
    I've seen whole families have to sleep on the floor
    But no that problem is not even the core
    I've seen fathers have to go out to rob
    To provide for his family because he ain't got no job
    And while a mother scraps the last penny in her pocket
    Her daughter being electrocuted playing with the electrical socket
    So I tell you this to say
    That even though you don't get your way
    Don't walk around with a frown
    Because there's always someone less fortunate than you around
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is soooooooo true!
    very nice flow...
     
  3. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is my first poem on the web. Please give me some suggestions. Please.....
     
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    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So true, so true boo.
    Liked the image portrayed here.

    By the way......
    Welcome to Destee's!!!

    :wave: :wave: :party: :kiss: :star: :rolling: :star: :kiss: :party: :wave: :wave:

    D's is the place to be!!!

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man...tell em....WLECOME TO DESTEES
    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:wave:


    this was a truthful flow
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome !!!!!!!!!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome from above as i spread u love
    welcome to da family of bond
    ya flow tyte a scribe so true
    i love what u do
    teach da love of being alive is a daily scribe
    thankful for what u got coz many ain't got jack
    when u feel ya less and have none
    theirs someone less off then u .......yes flow on !
    welcome to the house :) :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  7. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you hit the nail on the head....keep flowing.
     
  8. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for your replies. I hope to hear more of your replies in the future.
    Love,
    Foxy
     
  9. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I get all my poems from real life situations. Look for more in the future.
     
  10. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Got ur message on this ...and also felt the truth in ur words! Will look for more of your work.
     
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