Black Haiku : real world -a poem in haiku verse

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  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    listening on the phone
    techno voice "please be patient"
    what happened to real?

    the winds gusto moans
    the trees quivering rustle
    where are the people?

    when did this change start?
    when did machine replace heart?
    what happened to real?

    try not conforming
    the reel sputters "repeat please"
    Hey where is the real?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    like hidden notions
    i see the unthinkable
    is it real or what
     
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    Technology rules
    devoid of the human touch
    we long for so much

    Press 1 for English
    Press 2 por espanol, press
    3 for more options...
     
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    riding on a cloud
    giant airplanes push me down
    blast DIS THE REAL WORLD!
     
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    What happened to real?
    Before reality shows
    Before the credits ~
     
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    At times it seems that
    the more plastic something is
    the more it's embraced
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    plastic cards to pay
    interest rising everyday
    cash..no longer real?

    what happened to real?
    real money, real love, real truth
    did i see a star?


    (homage to langston )
    comment from the stoop:
    BABY that's a satellite
     
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    meanings different
    days past due yet tomorrow
    leave no truth to it
     
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    real?

    laproscopic me
    real titanium clamping
    shocking my system
     
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    oh man...it's like a Haiku-free-for-all in here....

    deepy, I know how hard it is to do this, so ima give you props first...that is amazing, to write on a difficult (for me) topic, and keep the haiku form. I love that style, it says more than just a simple ku.

    watz...your follow up is real funny..."press 3 for more options"

    all yall have a true gift of improvising, like a jazz jam session....i can never get in on one of these.
     
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