Poetry Critiques : Real Freedom

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by rastachant, Feb 25, 2009.

  1. rastachant

    rastachant Member MEMBER

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    I am the wind
    I am the water
    I am the sun
    I am his son
    I am free


    I am no longer of darkness
    I am full of light
    I am love
    I am loved
    I am loved from above
    I am free

    I am peaceful
    I am courageous
    I am a giver
    I've been given
    I'v been given another chance
    I am free

    I am a rescuer
    I'v been rescued
    I am a forgiver
    I'v been forgiven

    NOW THAT'S REAL FREEDOM !!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I am , yes you are this was nicely versed and had a ring to it that keeps the reader
    looking in deeper as it kiss the next never falling off course.

    Great piece poeticly
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very smooth pace to this, felt like I was ascending higher to freedom. Well done poet.
     
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    i agree with the other well done!
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    the true essence of life

    very well written inside the moment

    :donttell:

    ok do tell
     
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