Quiet Poetry Lounge : Reaching for "me"

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by queentswana, Dec 24, 2004.

  1. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another man, I don't want to see...
    need some time, to just be me

    Free of worry, free of pain
    no more "holding" or "placing" blame

    I need to relax, and kick off my shoes
    so tired of singing...the same old blues

    But time brings about, change in our life
    and behind is the heartaches, pains and strife

    The mistake I made, was to search for in you...
    all the things...you couldn't do

    Like placing "my" happiness, above your own
    but I wouldn't have done that...if I had known

    I wouldn't have lost , so many presious years
    or cried a river...of needless :crying: tears

    So...for a minute or two, I'll go it alone
    I regrett what I reaped...from what I have sown

    Instead of a bush...I got a "weed"...
    but I will ...
    plant...
    and
    plant...
    and
    plant...
    until I get what I need.​
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queent I felt the ache in this, but also a desire to learn more about the inner you. You seem to be so intuned to yourself already, more than most. Perhaps there is more for you yet to find, as hard as that is to fathom. I guess I feel this way because of the aura that appears to surround you, a self assured aura. Anywho, this piece caused me to relate and ponder, and that is always a good thing. Flow on poet.
     
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    sis i felt each line wow well yanno this was a tight flow..thank you for this one
     
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    word up feeling ya here ......
     
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    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I so feel this poem...
    for there was a time when
    I had a garden of weeds...
    beautiful weeds that grew tall as trees...

    ...but still, they were weeds

    so I dug them up from the root
    tilled that fallow ground...
    refertilized it with self love...
    watered it with a whole lot of me...
    and now...I'm living again

    this may be your poetry
    but it is also my story


    Eloquent and Regal poem...

    Much love my sister...Much love!
     
  7. bigdrizzle

    bigdrizzle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Another great piece...I see alot of myself in your poems, Queen. Thanks for expressing my thoughts.
     
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