Black Haiku : *Re-Introducing the Oku in the proper fashion...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Scry'be, Jun 3, 2007.

  1. Scry'be

    Scry'be Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    in the same vein as my brotha RICH, I want to introduce to some and re-introduce to a few the 'Oku,' which is a derivative of the haiku...the syllabic meter is 4 lines of 7.6.3.4-I feel that since my brotha came up with the 'Vaniku' i'd like to see some of us incorporate the two styles...it may serve to spicin' up the flow. I love you all and i'm blessed to be back.



    now u got that prize'd jive-yo
    hips tango my loins-i
    can't salvage
    me....sleepin' in u.




    kno myself. till fer/

    tile grounds; we gon
    reap what we
    reap real
    good!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    2 great styles together? Now, you know that's tight! :)

    We have climbed to the apex
    There's no turning back now
    Plant yo flag
    I shall salute

    The mountain's garden

    ripe and ready
    harvest time
    sure is
    nigh
     
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    Scry'be Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aiight sis Watz...you are truly on it boo boo!


    yo flag in site...yo land i'll
    walk and gatha sights and
    smells...u'll dent
    my soul-i'll smile!


    my inner mind-stream

    fresh and water'd,
    seal me with
    a kiss...
    life!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    This was awesome thinking to mix da two newest waves of poetry

    Beyond mankind withstanding

    every meassure of life
    only we
    as people can

    Our may day behold
    forth we are now
    future of
    temple
    here


    this will bring new flava and creation to a poet's hand and mental thoughts as they create
    may da Oku and ~V~ catch da world by storm of creational poetry.
     
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    With these two newest scribes in a mixing combo create a nother meaning as my mind circle around da concept
    life is born and her name is Van-io-ku or Va-ni-oku what a clash maybe i need to drive deeper to scribe what these two bring !

    But they together is a blast of poetry that's 9 lines in a format of (5-4-3-2-1-7-6-3-4)

    Vaniku and Oku ...................
     
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