Black Poetry : Raw Beauty

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  1. soulful2006

    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw it when I looked in the mirror at my body
    ANd through all the many imperfections that my eyes saw
    there was this thing of rare beauty strength and truth
    I could see that on those marks of time and struggle
    there was a story the one of my life
    and the things my young eyes and eighteen years have taught me
    I see that he didn't need to love me
    Nor did he want to
    Because I didn't know real
    Love I didn't know the love that was buried some
    thousands of miles away in the depths of my being
    The things that make up a real woman hidden somwhere deep down under the surface
    the beauty that transcends time
    Passed through generations of women
    Who desired to hide
    For fear that no one would ever know or hear
    their cries to let
    thier little lights shine
    I saw that beauty down my arms in my hair
    I saw on my knees and I felt free
    because that moment in my bathroom
    I saw everything that the magazines could never show you
    the things and parts that the plastic surgeon can't mold you
    the star that not even astronauts have seen
    I saw that thing
    That is my beauty In Its simplest form
    Raw Beauty
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Soulful:
    You said alot here. "Raw Beauty " This is a really nice write.
    flo poet flo
    Much Luv
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    truely it's within once u took time to see deep through the hourglass
    of mirror the beautiful reflection showed u proof of what raw beauty is .
     
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    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fantastic write and very well written!:welldone:
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    soulful....for 18 years young...this is absolutely beautiful...so warm and life-affirming...it is rare to see a young woman like yourself with such awareness....

    a phenomenal write...i came back twice to read this one.
     
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    Whew, there's that soulful style I've missed, those words that hit you right between the eyes, but with such flair. Such a wonderfully positive write.
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for feeling this write I felt I had to say something about what real beauty is especialy with the way women my age are falling victim to what the media would have them to believe is real beauty.
     
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    so true and most welcome sis u surely hit it on the head
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was truly some wonderful write go head poet flo on some mo.:terrific:
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you I am humbled
     
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