Black Poetry : Rat Race

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by 1poetsought, Jul 22, 2003.

  1. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    RAT RACE
    __________

    Cheese in a mission
    Sure tastes good...
    Place to lay your head
    Have a bite of warm food

    RAT RACE (the story)
    Coming right at you
    Is a take it or leave it
    Sad... but true

    I was somebody
    In a Beamer-
    Powder blue...
    Who worked all week
    And would steal some too

    Couldn't spell
    D-e-f-e-a-t
    Had I wanted to...
    Wouldn't tolerate no one
    Who even looked like y-o-u

    Put up or shut up-
    And make that fast!
    I had their destiny
    In the palm of each hand

    Losers of the world
    Would toast my glass
    I called all the shots
    They'd holler back... YES!

    Had my little posse
    Kissing big Black @ss!
    I'd bling-bling the suckers
    Whose love don't last

    Broke down the stretch
    My entourage passed
    I lost my shirt,
    And ran out of gas

    Sister,
    Mister... hipster
    Some coins for my cup?
    We're coming back strong
    A hustling for your wealth

    Help a brother out
    With your "class" act Mac
    Love ain't corrupt
    When the chips
    Aren't stacked!


    1poetsought ~ copyright 2003
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    powerful
    very powerful 1poetsought
    your flow,breaking it down
    telling the story, how things
    can go like
    a pattern
    wonderful
    Peace
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes indeed u rip dis to perfection
    the depth of this piece was awesome
     
  4. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    in this place
    the rat race
    rang so real to me
    i peeped out the window and saw rat race virtuality
    the words, my eyes, could see
    1poetsought props 4 the rat race because its REALITY
     
  5. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey 1Poet, :wave:

    This is is very deep piece! Feeling you here!! Nice flow!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
  6. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Extremely Good flow!

    E-X-T-R-A-O-R-D-I-N-A-R-Y:D :love: :love: :love: :love:
    LOVED IT !

    Blessinsg On Ya House!
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa :eek: this was like a abyss of poetic words
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Such truth! Much truth composed here! 1poet you never cease to amaze! Great flow!
     
  9. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Get that windshield? Well bump you then!

    Thanks, ya'll...
     
  10. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I've never heard so much truth in three lines before....

    Flow on brah!

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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