Black Poetry : rapture of pain

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Been there done that
    Is like talking to a wall
    Riddle diddle
    Fiddle
    Little
    Release as I exhale
    Moving swing
    Hurting
    Pretending
    Stab in the back
    turning flips
    Tryin pullin
    Jus reaching
    Searching…..
    Dayum !!
    just went back
    Two steps……
    been hit
    aint no fix
    its all mix up
    delusional vibe thriving
    like a thief in the middle
    of the night..
    and that mirror is broke
    cant find my light
    losing my soul
    turning in darkness
    lost of hope…
    black tears run
    for my pride is so little
    and my stride have faded away
    Power fold as I release
    the sound of my heart
    Like no one cares
    Can you hear
    Do you even know
    Do you believe….
    Hiding in the back
    And pretending
    aint getting it
    It just aint….
    Fiddle diddle dayum
    1 + 1 =2
    every time but ummmm
    the sum jus aint right
     
  2. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice drop.
    I like the line when you say
    delusional vibe thriving
    like a thief in the middle
    of the night..

    Nice work
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If something doesn't seem right there is some reason for it. Your words are so potent. Emotive flow here.
     
  4. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep cover cross da math
    felt ya on this inner emotional scribe
    da heart is leaking but the treasure
    is still afloat and in reach cross da math
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall for liking my
    off brand poem
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    when it flow from heart it always a masterpiece
    ya heart speaks clearly just cross math the problem
     
  7. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you again rich for feelin my scribe
    i just love to write ya know
    Peace my sweet brother King
    Angel
     
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    turtle1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    once again!!!! nice flow sista!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
  9. PurpleMoons

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    Off brand?
    Sister you gotta be jokin!
    All your scribes Touch
    the heart!
    I can't speak for anybody else,
    but I can say your vibe has touched me!
     
  10. Obscure

    Obscure Active Member MEMBER

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    decent.
    from the title i thought the poem was gonna take a different direction.
    i thought it was gonna be more in depth.
    it had its own emotion to it nevertheless.
    good read.
    i dont reply to poems i dont like.
    i dont like to. sometimes i do.
    but i like this piece so dont worry.
    the ending of this was amusing.
    nice drop.

    WuN...
     
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