Black Poetry : Random Thoughts

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Siren, May 1, 2009.

  1. Siren

    Siren Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Apr 10, 2009
    Messages:
    40
    Likes Received:
    5
    Occupation:
    R/A
    Location:
    The DE
    Ratings:
    +5
    SO, Like here I am awake, when all others in my world are sleep...........nothing exists really but the drone of the clock ticking back and forth..and the immense constraint darkness......So many ideas are vying for dominance in my psyche it's a ridiculous freakshow of thoughts, that come to me wrapped snugly in the colors of different emotions.....blue...red.. ..black....sending my mind in to brilliant kaleidoscope of colors that could match the city skyline.....sleep is calling my name but The GRUEL commands and demands I remain......AWAKE....
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,978
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,178
    mental thinking keep us awake for the true reality .....well felt sis
     
  3. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

    Joined:
    Feb 28, 2009
    Messages:
    19,252
    Likes Received:
    5,505
    Gender:
    Female
    Ratings:
    +5,560
    Whew, sistah, I SO felt this down to my soul!

    Fabulous descriptive language in this! The imagery and the emotion are both so palpable!
     
  4. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 13, 2006
    Messages:
    1,261
    Likes Received:
    205
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Teacher
    Location:
    Somewhere between paradise and diaster
    Ratings:
    +228
    way to capture that moment of randomness of thought that we all have. this was :welldone:
     
  5. Siren

    Siren Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Apr 10, 2009
    Messages:
    40
    Likes Received:
    5
    Occupation:
    R/A
    Location:
    The DE
    Ratings:
    +5
    Thanks guys:couple:
     
  6. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 26, 2003
    Messages:
    10,784
    Likes Received:
    4,235
    Gender:
    Male
    Ratings:
    +4,471
    the gruel is a mofo....
    tyte drop poet....

    one love
    khasm
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    It's those thoughts that just won't leave your min alone, taking on a life all their own. Spot on description poetess.
     
  8. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jun 11, 2001
    Messages:
    7,648
    Likes Received:
    40
    Occupation:
    thrivin' spiritually/physically/emotionally/financ
    Location:
    where failure is not an option
    Ratings:
    +42
    poet

    right out the gate you got my respect

    i wish more people had your awareness sista

    this work show the depth of your existence

    and that's what we lack out there "depth"

    and i appreciate that anytime someone can see their "true" self

    i'm all for it

    peace

    oh yea these thoughts you expressed are far from RANDOM it ain't even funny IMO
     
  9. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    May 25, 2001
    Messages:
    4,182
    Likes Received:
    171
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Spreading Joy.... need some?
    Location:
    Sixburgh, Pa.
    Ratings:
    +221
    Hello Siren...

    Late at night or early morning when sleep can’t seem to take us is when the clock seems to tick the loudest topping the sound of our thoughts. Yes, I’ve experienced such “random thoughts” moments as you so vividly expressed.

    This is the first work of yours that I responded to, so I'd like to welcome you to the poetic playground!:hi:


    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
Loading...