Black Poetry : random thought

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Dec 7, 2003.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    gurls stand on street
    corners with exotic dreams
    of gucci enlarging in their
    thoughts and attached to
    the hollow of their brains...

    i try to maintain reason
    in a world that has a haze
    around its ability to think.....

    as we slowly sink into fallicy
    and blind fantasy that
    every thing "is just okay..."

    we stumble through
    street for prostitutes
    for just a roll in the hay...

    and stay crazed
    in a mouse maze
    to The Middle Of Nowhere Land


    our minds are constipated
    intigating wicked rhymes
    of ghettos and
    "im a pimp" and
    "ima bust u in the lip?"


    to be continued.....
     
  2. Zen Master_1

    Zen Master_1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Profound thought brewing

    the_story, I feel your thoughts for it remind me of a time as I walked the wild streets of Los Angeles, so much to see with young eyes that will have its own effect as you get older in life. So in the mean time keep your thought unclouded as you walk and remember these avenue or events are stepping paths involving life, which means you don't have to walk the same paths but find what is comfortable and safe, above all keep compassion in the mixs for without your view will turn harsh.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wild walk down da lane
    keep ya focus clear as i take in
    the myth of wildness u see and know
    the reality is better ...i too can go back to my
    younger days and all i took in from the life of
    streets ....
     
  4. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks im glad u all feelin my point of view on these things....
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feelin ya story
    nice write...flow on...
    my little sister...
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Nice.. Waiting for the continuation.

    the_story you are a great talent. Keep maintaining the focus. Congrats again on being poet of the week. :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar:
     
  7. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah thanks again for reading me, i love ur work as well,
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    Story, I remember when I was young and walking past the combat zone, and seeing images like this. You don't think it's ok, but that it's part of the landscape. I'll say this every time...you write SO well.
     
  9. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :blush: thanks watzianame i appreciate it....
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    -story
     
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