Black Poetry : ram in the bush

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  1. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In the midst of your sorrows
    Your pains and your joy you
    Hear a voice echoing from in
    The midst of your inner being;

    When you felt that all that could
    Go wrong has appeared you find
    Yourself sittng in the middle of your
    own Job type affliction wilderness;

    this is when the voice cries out for
    you to give up the most precious of
    all that you ask and all the you seek
    for nothing compares to such treasure;

    He doesn’t ask for your gems of clothes,
    Not your car or your home but the piece
    To the puzzle that holds it all together
    And gives you eternal gratification;

    As you gather you things and walk your
    Seed down a path designed for two but
    Only created for one you wonder how if
    He loves me so he would do this to me;

    And you gather your stones, sticks and
    Hay to prepare a place of sacrifice for
    One whom you will never see again if
    You’ve heard the wishes of your master;

    Your turmoil is magnified, your past creeps
    In like a thundering rain pouring into the
    Tattered worn covering of you heart and
    You shake when you look love in the eye;

    Knife lifted to sacrifice your family, your
    Friends, your old life for new love, even the
    Most precious of all things worthy to your
    Life, the seed in which you nurtured within;

    As tears roll down your cheek and thoughts
    Of never finding peace, lost hope for true love,
    Commitment all destroyed by the words you
    Hear just to follow the mustard seed of life;

    You hear a voice from across the way just
    Before the final strike was to appear and you
    Look to see a faith born Capricorn, standing
    With arms full of love, peace, serenity and joy

    Reminding you that within these arms that
    hold you dear is the faith of God to conquer
    all and when your path looks difficult with no
    way out just know that I am always with you..

    your God-given ram in the bush…
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YES!

    wonderfully written!!
    i never thought about
    my experience like this.
    thank you.
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    MO, MO, MO

    You shake when you look love in the eye

    loved that line

    but MO you killing me man

    your work is beyond words at this point and i have no more
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    YES LIKE HOLY MOLY MORE MORE MORE!!!
    KEEPIN ME ON MY TOES.............AS I LOVE THIS
    PIECE HERE:toast: :toast: :toast:
     
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    Cannot Let it Pass

    You knew I would comment--but my only comment is that this is such a well crafted piece that goes far beyond any outside implications--well done--and excellent use of allegory to make a point--similar to a morality story--well done--Amun-Ra

    ;)
     
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    Ra,

    of all the comments i receive i always llok to write a piece that would invoke your comments. over time we've shared many works and insight and each time our paths cross i gain more. Today i am blessed by your words and i thank you for the read.

    $$$RICH$$$ and Da' Street So'Ja,

    no matter what i scribe i know that my brothers in Spirit will always sharpenme more. This piece was for someone very dear to me and i needed to let them know that i walk with them not just in life but in eternal spirit. You two always walk within my thoughts and i aprreciate your words. Forgive me for not always responding to your scribes but my time is limited to just posting right now, but know that i read all the works here...

    Wildflower,

    always a privelage and blessing to have you read my works...thank you...

    I am humbled and quieted by you all thank you...
     
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