Black Poetry : Raindrops

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by bahati, Oct 2, 2003.

  1. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    See
    heaven's crying with me today
    all these tears
    at least heaven can still cry
    I've cried so much
    I've run dry
    I would give so much
    if I could just cry it all out
    let it flow out
    let it all go
    all my past experience
    that still determines my present
    all my negative thoughts
    about life and love
    all the addictions I'm struggling
    to overcome
    every day is a fight for survival
    a war against demons
    every day again I lose
    destroying myself a little more with every new day
    I hate myself for being so weak
    hate myself for constantly disappointing others
    people I love even
    I am in despair
    don't have a clue where to go
    don't know what to do
    I just wanna fall asleep
    and stay in the land of dreams -
    eternally
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a strong poem! Life is something ain't it? Don't sweat life trials, they makes us better. Get Up Outta that funk by helping someone else. The way that you write, you can help a whole lot of folk. God, got your back... look to serve others in need.

    PEACE
     
  3. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Don't drown in the sorrow. It does cause some rain. Some pain. But you have a life to share. One bad apple can spoil the whole bunch, but toss that apple to the back.

    Dance with your dreams and sorrow. Laugh and smile yourself into a better tomorrow. Someone is waiting and wanting you.

    " All the addictions I'm struggling
    to overcome
    every day is a fight for survival "

    No sleep or drink can completely change how you feel. Only you. Remember the sweet parts and let it go. The heart is resilent.. and so is the sprit.
     
  4. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    thank you, you two. your words make me feel so much better.
     
  5. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love this. Life is something, eveyone has their own trials to get through, but it 's better to let it out than to try to do it all on your own. So I feel you.
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep...i loooved it....i feel this way a lot myself...but like Hodee said, 'don't drown in the sorrow'...just go ahead and let it out though, don't hold it in. much love to you
     
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    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    heartfelt and touching....this was very good!!! stay tuned...I have something to write about this....

    Great job poet.
     
  8. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey Bahati :wave:
    aint seen you on the board in a bit but glad you're back to share ya self..let the sorrow flow out my sista...we'll be here :)
     
  9. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so emotional deep and heartfelt....powerful poem...
     
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    yea sometimes it can be like this, but be strong... u gotta be strong. tyte flow...
     
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