Black Poetry : Rain after loves train

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  1. Flyy baby luv

    Flyy baby luv Member MEMBER

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    The sky is grey with meloncholy grime,
    my heart is lost half gone eith him,
    so my body crys
    because it hurts my eyes thet I cant see my loves demise,
    So I pray to GOD to ease the pain,
    thats when he sent me Dark Rain.

    You see I've alwayse rode on loves train,
    But yet what do I have to gain?
    So I got off at the last stop,
    and decided to do a little flip-flop,
    Well my love is gone and I'm all alone,
    Well, not anymore Dark Rain is about to pour,

    You see my Dark Rain will ease my pain,
    and rinse off all the shame that made me ride the train, that drove me insane. :insane:
    Hey you know about loves train,
    It wants to gine everybody a ride but when it gets to full
    and the passengers get irritated and try to scratch and pull,
    it realized it gets to hot and puts them off at the very next stop.

    Well, I happened to be the last one on this train,
    I could'nt take it cause the last passenger left a stain.

    So instead of me getting on the next train,
    I just stand here and experience Dark Rain.
     
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    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey poet welcome...



    i like this piece is was clear...

    clear in tha tropping tears..




    bring us more...


    and fly baby love.....:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    how deeply i feel you here sometime the dark rain from
    the love train leaves pain but the healing starts when u
    know the different .....this piece was so deeply felt and
    u express it so well wow!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The imagery of rain is often used, but to say that the rain was dark, well that description weighs heavy on the reader's mind. I like the way you worked this.
     
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