Black Poetry : Rage

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by brotherman, Mar 23, 2002.

  1. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rambling, running on with sentences spitting with every speech of spite, tonight won't make it to tomorrow if me and this cat commense to fight, clench fists real tight like pearly whites that I'm grinding through enamel, trying to reach dude's frequency but he's on some other channel, set my sites on infared cause his soul I'm heat seeking, lost in seaward storm of anger to the point where there's no beacon, ready to drain with vampiric tenacity because someone's audacity, has instated a state of rage beyond my capacity...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Rage of war mad respect @ ya flow on !!!
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this,
    i'm probably the last person that should be commenting on this but maybe i think it would be easier to read if you broke the lines up perhaps that why not to many people have commented on it. its kind of like reading a paragraph and not a poem.
    dont get me wrong though
    i do like the poem i know i been there to many times before growing up in a rough neighborhood
     
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    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel like you structured this poem to go with the feeling...
    There's no structure to rage! Flow on brother! :)
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    um rage is a mutha
    handle yours
    this guy seem likely to 'catch' a bad one

    peace dun

    dsSNy
     
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    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wooowe!!

    I hope he ain't me!!
    Tyte scribe here Bruh!!
     
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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bro. Man...checkin out all your posts...first Id like to say welcome to the forum..and secondly..I see something in common with all your peices...all of them shyts is tyght ! tyght as hell ! keep scribing -you got the gift !


    Peace
    g-man
     
  8. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    back to the top for those who missed the bus
     
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    Finally i'm in

    i guess it's ok
     
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