Quiet Poetry Lounge : quiet flow...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Jan 7, 2005.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    when was the moment of
    conversion
    "turning"...recognition..
    shifting slowly like the moon from
    quarters to halves
    and now
    whole...
    was it in the reading of the lotus leaves
    or the seeing of the willow trees
    was it in the death of my hearts desire
    or the birth of my hearts desire
    was it in the soound of the gospel song
    or the trembling trebbling of the horn
    was it the lips that entwined my own
    or the feet grasping every stone
    was it the smell of an aromatic day
    or a body slowly rotting in decay
    somehow
    all entities...turned me..every so subtly
    till..
    born again..without the "hallelujah screams"
    or church or temple entering..
    so simple and so pure THE DEVINE
    slipped up and down my spine
    caressing all my bones
    and now the rich marrow
    of me..
    THE CREATOR
    rooted

    ETERNALLY
    i am amazed at this
    turning..
    this conversion ..

    like the moon
    turning slowly toward
    sun
    shifting day to night
    not startling fireworks
    nor shouting hums
    a quiet rotation
    continuum....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done here poet wow! love this
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A change made, whose depth is fathoms deep, yet it moved quietly, as to not disturb life's flow. The construction of this was marvelous poet, as was the concept. Flow on.
     
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    ...simply stated

    :bowdown:
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you did this so well very nicely posed
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now THIS is a thing of beauty! Lovin this flow, deepy. Wow.
     
  7. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    dear arich....thank you so much
    watz...i really think sometimes these epiphanies seem to work...the change so swift you have to step back and think...when did that happen..thanks for encouragement,,,i am still working on this piece...trying to moved totally toward essence...like spirt is...essence...i'm still playing..your words help (as does everyone elses)

    WOW SAGE i had to go look up diagr....etc...thanks for stopping in , for supporting.

    appreciate you mzblkangel...always positive
    gempis...you know , like watz & $rich$ i be depending on you all in my constant creative search for continuum....and no question you help...thanks..
     
  8. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome Deepy
     
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    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nicely dun
     
  10. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this poem was very beautifully written, such an ease flow, and the message so peaceful and calm,
    great poem deepy
    great poem

    SCW
     
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