Black Poetry : Quest unfulfilled

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  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He told me I had a beautiful voice
    even helped me develop it.
    Guided me in the direction
    and encouraged me to be more confident.
    He was the only one who could reach deep down
    within my dark place and find that light.
    He pulled out of me passion.
    Passion to live create and develop.
    He was more than a muse more than a mentor.
    He became my purpose. I strove to be
    all that he said I was capable of being.
    For I longed to look into his eyes and see
    the pride.
    In his eyes I saw my forever.
    So I honed my craft, put my all into
    it so I could show him how
    much I had grown.
    But when I went forth to share
    he was no loger around.
    And he took with him my
    heart, passion, fire, drive.
    I long everyday for the moment
    to share, to show, to give.
    That day will never come and so
    my quest has not been fulfilled.
    And in that I find a deep emptiness.
     
  2. AfroBoricuaRoni

    AfroBoricuaRoni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aww

    That was beautiful. I can relate. The reason they leave is beyond me but at least I gained as a person in the process ya know?
     
  3. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hear you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling u sistah all the empty spaces will be replaced
    wit warmth hold faith and continue forward
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gee, thatgirl, I could just feel tugging of your heart strings in this one...your words just capture that empty feeling. Things will get better, until then, keep being kind to the poet who is so blessed to be able to write this way.
     
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    i could feel this as i read this
    very well done piece
    enjoyed this
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    I am feelin this and sendin you hugs, girl.
     
  8. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you everyone for sending me the hugs and love.
    Guys I am cool honestly I am just writing from my perceptive eye and open heart. I feel other's emotions and put them into words. But thank so much for
    listening to my words. :grouphug:
     
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    a deep emptiness...

    wow that just made my heart clinch...

    emotive write...
     
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    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this piece really meant a lot to me for personal reasons
     
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