Black Poetry : Put up or shut up!

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  1. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You said you came to show her love.
    But you gave yourself to many without a glove.
    When time came for blood test the surprise
    was no pleasure, and in time there will be none
    to measure.

    You said you love her beyond degree.
    But when you argue you are the first to flee.
    Said you came to see how she was doing.
    But all the time it was just "Fat" you were
    chewing!

    Always talking about what the future held.
    But, you can't even seem to hold a job.
    Complained about her haircut, but for
    four days you didn't bathe, so who is the
    slob?

    Peace is the answer she was seeking, but
    all the time it was painful words you were
    speaking... Now it's time to mend your ways
    if you really want to see those better days.

    See I told my sister she deserved so much
    more, than what your dreary life had in store.
    But as she drank her Seven-up...she finally
    belched and said without reverence,
    PUT UP OR SHUT UP!

    BJS (c) 2003
     
  2. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ****....good flow :)
     
  3. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks SwT!

    Got to speak for the sista's who have not found that good love yet. Thanks for reading I appreciate your support!

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi, :wave:

    Very well expressed piece!!

    Great flow!! :toast:

    All my best to you!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    my sistah dis was off da hook
    gurl u jam dis one Tyteeeeeeeeeeeee!!
     
  6. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you fellow scribes!

    I love to serve I love to share, I spread my poetry everywhere. To give some knowledge and food for thought, is better than any designer dress I bought!

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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    Hi msluciousb..this is nice...wonderful flow
    Peace :heart:
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tyte... i like this, keep em comin sistah...
     
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    good message...
    if it feels like love
    less than half the time
    then its something else...
    strong flow sis
    peace
    khasm
     
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