Black Poetry : punk

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Aug 20, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I see the inhumanities
    the callous bizness of lying
    stealing.
    I know when deeds are done
    for pure greed
    no moralistic creeds
    feed
    I hear the echos of the souls
    who have lost to those
    who think they have the highest
    glow
    even tho they are below
    I smell the blood red
    murderous murky folk
    who kick you down

    I talk the game of doing
    but
    I feel the pains and bruising
    but
    i touch a soul or two
    but
    like Assata said
    I'm a PUNK
    cause i really dont do





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  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You've been really digging deep of late deepy. Hmmmm, I do think that our ancestors were built of stronger "stuff" perhaps they had to be. But to realize that there is more that needs to be done, that has to account for something. These are the thoughts that popped into my head while reading this piece. I love these scribes that make me think.
     
  3. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks watz...the idea came after going to the afrocentric sayings thread and someone had posted assata shakur. I am looking in..to let go and let God
     
  4. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice flow sis! Somtimes we have to look within ourselves to see what is really going on! :oops:
     
  5. Khasm13

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    hmmmmmmmmm......
    this was a very interesting piece
    i didn't know where you were going until the end...
    and thas the sign of great poems....this was great
    one love
    khasm
     
  6. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling on dis ...nice drop
     
  7. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your name says it all. Like Watz, when I finished reading, my mind was racing, thinking of all I just soaked in. Great piece.
     
  8. nabraska

    nabraska Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling this one.
     
  9. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah this nice but let me drop this one

    Rhymes dash out the brain and smash the lame but cash
    Is my aim trash is lame cause rash on a mainframe in a flash
    Write great but lightweight but you the type hate to see
    Skills that builds rhyme empires your nickel dime desires be
    Whack,
     
  10. Poetrymama

    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deep poem.
     
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