Quiet Poetry Lounge : Punctuational Love (For Single Sisters Only)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by oldsoul, Aug 6, 2004.

  1. OldSoul

    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Punctuational Love

    Come, let me undress you with my metaphors,
    While you embrace me with your phrases,
    Caress me with your punctuations,
    As my concepts sing your praises.

    Slide my sentence into your paragraph,
    And massage me gently with your nouns,
    Straddle my elongated participle,
    And I'll exclaimate your sounds.

    At critical mass in the last stanza,
    You'll move to the rhythm of my flow,
    You'll shudder with the style of my penmanship,
    And paradise is where we will glow.

    --08/06/04--
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    With a flow like this, you needed to say single, AND unattached. You don't want any irate boyfriends responding, now do you? LOL Seriously, I liked the way you penned this, creatively using language usage in such a flavorful way.
     
  3. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    Is this eroctic? :nuts:
    I feels like I was just seduced! :smokin: LOL!

    Very creative writing Brother Oldsoul!!!!! :luv:
    What a magnificent piece! But so are your others!!!!

    Loving your flows!!!!!!
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My brother this was nice
    very tight hmmm well
    anyway i just behave
    love the drop!!!

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :eeek: :blush: *giggles* oh my...
    brotha i feel a sudden urge to allow you to give me an english lesson...:look: :)

    This was creative and intellectually stimulating...to say the LEAST :) but of course

    it must be since this is direct from BLACKLAND ;) loved it brotha :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very awesome flowing to da single love's
     
  7. poetic_diva

    poetic_diva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OHMY SUCH A TIGHT FLOW
    DEFINITELY MADE ME GLOW
    FROM HEAD TO TOE
    I NEED TO HEAR MO
    FROM YOU.

    MUCH LOVE AND MANY BLESSING.

    POETIC_DIVA


    "I CAN DO ALL THINGS THROUGH CHRIST, WHICH STRENGHTENS ME" PHILIPS 4:13
    :love: :fairy: :fairy: :spin: :spin: ;) ;)
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hot: *Whew*...just heard this one, live and in verbal color...

    Wow...this was just Goooooooooooooooooooooood!

    :hot: Verse Flambé :hot:
     
  9. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I LOVEEDDDDD THIS. This was great word usage and the imagery was nice.
     
  10. toylin

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    ohwee! I was just seduced by words! THAT painted some strong imagery in my mind.. where's the parental guidence warning label? LOL! That was great.. Keep flowing!
     
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