Black Poetry : Psychobabble From a Tattered Soul

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  1. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whats the point int talking when nobody seems to hear
    I've walked so long and all I have to show for my struggles is tears
    I'm lost on a straight path and the street sign says confusion
    I guess my life is just another picture perfect illusion
    People look at me and see an image of "perfection"
    So God (if your there) why do I seem so small compared to my reflection
    Im trying to find a way to turn my retret into advance
    But my heart and mind are arguing over who wears the pants
    I cant tell you what I was and don't know who I've become
    How do I know where Im going if I dont know where I'm from
    I wanna be a poet but wats a poet who cannot write?
    Where's my savior to show me the light, my friend to back me up in a fight
    My soul is a battlefield where my feelings and thoughts go to war
    I keep trying to pick up the peices, but everywhere I look, there are more
    My being is spinning continually in a whirlpool of depression
    I was just putting me together when someone severed my connection
    I look at the people around me and for many, I feel hate
    None of them bothered helping me...they thought it was too late.
    All I wanted was somebody to simply confide in
    But im stuck in the sam place so many souls have died in


    DEPRESSION


    It seems like there aint enought tissue in the world to dry my nightly tears
    And suffereing is the consequences for being wise beyond my years
    How will I become a woman when I have no room to grow
    I cant even be myself cuz who i am,...I do not know.
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    kori hey, i liked this, it was deep, showed emotion,
    much love,
    -story
     
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    well felt yet one hear and know ya struggles
    the pain and emotions with one hand a touch
    and many years of tears can be dry hope faith

    very deep scribe
     
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    heartfelt very deep write posed well
    i likes
     
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    this is a very thoughtful piece here, the angst of growing up and living in a society where personal connections aren't necessarily as real as they need to be...wonderful write, poet...and you are, a poet.
     
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    My sistah,

    This was definitely real and I join you in your pain . . . ONE.
     
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    oh my ..you are so on point on this...not enough tissue for the tears
    this is wonderful
    Peace
     
  8. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all very much for replying . Thank you alter...sometimes i really wonder though...and Bluewater...i cant even cry no more....all my clothes seemed to be soaked sometimes
     
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