Black Poetry : Promises

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A hard blow
    Straight to the chest
    Piercing thru the skin
    Thru the heart
    Just words
    That's all they were
    With an added
    "I promise"
    So what's the difference?
    What about it
    Gives the other words
    More meaning?
    Is it just me?
    Am I held at fault
    Because I trusted?
    Because I wanted to love
    And be loved?
    Wanted to feel
    Have something
    No, Someone
    To hold onto
    While I felt myself slip
    Into nothing
    But the promises
    Broken little shards of glass
    Just like the mirror
    From beneath my fist
    They were just words
    No meaning held within
    They let me hold on
    Only for a short time
    before they shoved me beneath .......
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i hear and feel you here ....keep writing
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as one door close another will open...i been down this raod i so understand your words

    Peace
    Angel
     
  4. ARKontheRiSe

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    i like i like!!!
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If you promise me a rose...
    I'll go out and buy a pot
    my imagination grows into roses by the plot

    that was a piece of a poem I use to know and love, so no doubt, I understand you. nice flow poet
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Promises unkept...broken promises do hurt just like the shards of glass you described. Many will remember a time like this, and recall the pain, for you described the ache well. Thank goodness we get past it.
     
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    This was straight and to the point! I really like that part about just because they add the word promise on it, like it's supposed to be special. I feel u all the way on this. Great poem! :jumping:
     
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