Black Poetry : PRICE OF LOVE

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Price to love is pain
    from pain come strength
    a building block to heart
    the emotional feelings
    become greater within
    a sparkle gleam deeper
    the tag on your love
    hold no price your worth
    is the essence held inside
    but i paid a great deal
    and in return u gave me
    sorrow through your greed
    was i just a lable stamped
    like gold or silver
    did u not knoweth me well
    before u asked for such
    royalities or was it out
    of love and confession
    i was told it was a bet !
    now today u weep in the
    same sorrow and feel the
    pain of love
    the double edge sword
    can be safe yet dangerous
    let not your lip drip more lies
    but seek truth through
    unconditional love
    the price we pay to be held
    gosh men need loving too !

    :deal: :love: :donttell: they yep! :argue:

    stay tune pt. II

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    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Light yet heavy

    <floats in>

    I really enjoyed the tone of this and the underlining playfulness that seems to hide behind each line until it is revealed at the end, which was quite unexpected (at least to me). Excellent job of contrasting/constructing a light tone and expressing it with words generally used to convey heavy/ deep emotions and feelings.

    Great work!

    keep the words moving

    peace&1luv

    <floats out>
     
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    Yes, everyone needs love, yet some are afraid to take that chance. Feelings are not to be played with or a wager to place a bet on. What's up with that any way? Anywho, intriguing flow, awaiting part 2.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I dont know what to say but great job. Only bad thing is this reminds me of my estranged wife smh.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thankz a million Legendof 1 spirit for the beautiful uplifting words

    Thankz Watz for the love and visit on this twist effects of the price
    many pay to love ....stay tune to 2

    thankz Godssoulja indeed this took me back to my yesteryears
     
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    all i can say right now i feel this wow...
     
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    thank u sista Angel , the price we pay to love and want
    can be a real pain.
     
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    This one kinda crept up on me, $$RICH$$, and then suddenly I was all up in it. I really feel what you're sayin. This was beautifully done.
     
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    CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SEQUEL ... EXPOSE HER FOR WHAT SHE REALLY IS ...

    A USER WILL USE UNTIL THE ONE BEING USED QUITS GIVIING THEM SOMETHING TO USE ... A CRACKHEAD CAN'T BE A CRACKHEAD W/OUT CRACK
    AN ALCOHOLIC CAN'T BE AN ALCOHOLIC W/OUT ALCOHOL ...

    DO YOUR THANG RICH ... FLOW WITH THE ESSENCE THAT ONLY YOU POSSESS ...
     
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    indeed thank you gempis for the visit and warm love

    big Thankz to u sista Ms MochaB for the visit and
    warm reply on this .
     
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