Quiet Poetry Lounge : Pretending

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MzBlkAngel, Sep 10, 2004.

  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In the heavens above
    The rainbow disappeared
    Pretending I am not dying
    Inside…
    Like a cloud I put on a show
    Full of tears hurting inside
    For the moon stop shining
    As the sun turns black
    Sky gray….and I miss you
    For that stars went away…
    My heart begins to call you
    And no one knows but me
    For I lost my words
    But a million years from now
    I will still love you
    On a dust road I sit
    Waiting for that love to return
    For I feel it near but so far
    The days are lonely
    As the nights are cold
    Pretending I am not dying
    Inside…
    When I cant breath
    Twisted and wounded
    For the walls have closed in
    Like a thirst that wont go away
    As I die inside….
    I close my eyes
    Hope this reach you
    As I place it in the wind…
    Kiss and goodnight for where
    Ever you are….
    I miss you
    Pretending I am not dying
    Inside…
    When I am :crying:

    (C) 2004​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    emotional heart felt scribe look to da master for guiding light !
     
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    wow... :(
    ...you could feel
    the pain pouring
    through each stanza...
    I know what it is to miss
    someone this much...
    and it's always more intense
    at night...when everything is
    quiet and still
    and you're left alone with
    nothing but you and your
    thoughts of...them

    Heartfelt peace Sister...
    Sage
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you both for the love on my scribe....
    i so love to write and create.....

    Peace
    And
    Love
    Angel
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well, you created a piece wherein you can feel the heart aching. Emotive flow.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh girl, this is an amazing piece. And I truly do feel ya - I keep it all on the inside too, and no one has any idea. Much love and peace to you. :heart:
     
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    Heartache, described with such passion. I'm following in your footsteps on this night, heaven help me..... Tight.
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all happy you all like my creative flow
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Wow!

    My heart begins to call you
    And no one knows but me
    For I lost my words
    But a million years from now
    I will still love you​


    This is simply OutStandingly Beautiful!!!!
    As one who has experienced this depth of pain,
    several times, and learned that, yes, we will live through it,
    but there is no true way to dull the pain; it must be endured
    and lived through, each and every lonly night and allowing the pain
    to come through you like in this one, means you will become more
    Beautiful and Stronger, too.
     
  10. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awwwww man...that's so sad. That sucks. Poem was beautiful, just sucks to be missing someone that much. Anyways, nice peice Angel.
     
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