Black Poetry : Present State

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  1. ComplicatedOne

    ComplicatedOne New Member MEMBER

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    Present State

    Unnaturally twisted up inside...
    A shipwreck in a wine bottle

    My mind and heart- distant strangers...
    A bottle of separated water and oil

    My tears...
    A quickly dripping faucet

    My hair...
    Multicolored tangled wires

    My eyes...
    The hue of an apple

    My body...
    Roadkill on Main Street

    My heart...
    A beating drum fading in the distance
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Complicated One,
    Welcome to our world, which is now yours too :spin:
    Yeah, most of us have suffered those same complications of the heart, but that too soon pass..nice piece poet...^5
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of pece & respect
    welcome from above as i bless u some poetic love

    in each state of time we all seem to have crossed this path of
    complication , ya not alone .
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Such descript metaphors, making us take a closer look at complications of life. Welcome to Destees, ready to read more from you.
     
  5. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!

    I am awed. You my be the complicated one but your poems are a revolutionary rhyme. I've got to say that there so much just in the vivid images you picked throughout the poem to keep you amazed for a good minute. I'm saying to myself dang why didn't I think of that! Just Greatness in so few words Complicated One!
     
  6. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    well

    understanding your angle here wasn't so complicated

    lol

    feeling you on life's journey


    peace and good luck
     
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