Poetry Critiques : Pregnant

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by miss-no-love, Mar 3, 2005.

  1. miss-no-love

    miss-no-love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Guess what?
    I'm pregnant, yes I'm having your baby
    and I aint the only one who got to take care of this responsibilty
    You see you helped me make this, I didn't do this by myself
    You said I wouldn't be alone, you will be there if I needed any help
    now you want to neglect me, want to forget how I told you that we are having a baby
    You want to forget about me and our situation to tend to yo' girlfriend, but I can't get mad cause you told me you had a lil' wifey in the begining.
    No, it's not bout you and me, it's about our seed
    it's about 8 months from now being a father that my baby really needs
    OH HONEY! I don't want you, you already know what you got to do,
    be there for yo seed mentally, finacially and emotionally too
    and I feel sorry for your lil wifey cause she fell in love with a sorry excuse of a man
    I bet she didn't have you getting me pregnant apart of you and her plans
    S*** it wasn't apart of mines either.


    Again this is ya gurl miss-no-love tell me what you think :hearthis:
     
  2. cthames

    cthames New Member MEMBER

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    understanding

    a man is gon b a man,do s*** that dont make no sense, but you remember you and god can do this
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was cool. Now write one from the point of view of a responsible sister who checks herself before she wrecks herself!
     
  4. Khasm13

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    whas going down miss-no-love...when i looked at the title....i was like...it's either gonna be about a good situation or a bad situation...there's nothing in between.......after reading it...i was like....this poem is really bad...not bad meaning bad but bad meaning good!...lol...these couple of lines rang in my head for a sec after i read it...

    No, it's not bout you and me, it's about our seed
    it's about 8 months from now being a father that my baby really needs


    good job poet...i wanna see some more joints from you...word
    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nicely done a well felt poem and fill with echos !
    nice work
     
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