Black Poetry : poseidon's lungs

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thepoetsean, Mar 30, 2001.

  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mmone
    11.46 am

    i feel overwhelmed.

    i feel me...losing sanity--
    rapidly--
    can it be?

    i sometimes hide behind the strength of--
    metaphors similies and connotation similar to
    the fox's characteristics--

    sean ain't what he used to be.
    sean ain't who he used to be--
    he's changing--
    constantly...
    can it be?

    i used to love--
    but its undescribable now--
    it feels like hurt sometimes--
    it feels like pain sometimes--
    it feels like pins and needles--
    me close to the edge...

    (I wanna leap)

    leaping from love--
    wishing for its far-gone simplicity--
    longing for its predestined uncondition--
    where are you love?

    nowhere near me--
    @ the bottom of the sea--
    trying out my poseidon's lungs--
    my sea legs--

    love left us...
    love left me--
    abandoned me--
    in my deepest time of need--
    when my emotions externally bleed--
    could
    it be?

    (the only explanation i can find.)

    untilloveorthelifeofmeresurfaces,

    i'm witchall.

    espee.sean.greg.perk
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Say It Ain't So!!!!

    Sean,

    Very emotional piece. I'm hoping that ya don't really feel like ya described.

    Ya flows are always steady and true...

    If any resurfacing takes place, it's a resurfacing of bigger and better things that "thepoetsean" holds inside until the time is right!!!

    Keep scribin' Poet!!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
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    Sean,

    allowing us to see a different side of you. poignant piece and i agree with GQ. i hope it is just creative writing on this puiece. your unknown potential is too great...
     
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    dammmn

    poseidon's lungs...

    after i saw that title, i HAD to peep this..

    you have the gift....
    that's a sweet title... just ill

    --hypersleep
     
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    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mm mm mmmmm!

    dayum boy!!
    ur talent just astounds the hell outta me!
    does it ever cease to amaze?



    i guess not
     
  6. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks

    thank you all for the love!!!


    sean
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have

    always had to approach your poetry with my thinking cap firmly tied around my head...you bring it, my eloquent bruhtha..you bring it. THIS heah, is quality, and beauty, and OH souldeep.

    Thank you for allowing my mental to expand, on mo gen.

    A
     
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    deep sea diving

    thepoetsean -

    your name fits perfectly yo.

    I don't just hand out accolades and
    smiley faces and gold stars ...
    but no doubt - THIS was profound.

    I identified.
    I imagined you - leaping, swimming, searching.

    I was there yo -
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sean this joynt was too da extreme!!! **** you talented dog!

    Reas
     
  10. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    to all my people in m'listenin' circumference...

    FAM...

    It's not like I ain't surrounded by talent!!! I'm feedin' off of what i'm reading!

    y'all keep writing and I PROMISE I WILL...


    won.one.ichi.1

    sean.
     
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