Quiet Poetry Lounge : "Pork Cracklins"

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  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :fyi: the pork part is just for the write ya'll



    taken by surprise,
    yet mummified,
    can i catch a ride?
    caught my eye,
    ain't no lie,
    oh yeah--you's fly..........but why?

    (i don't like pork)

    you're fly becasue the mountain tops,
    are high yet low.
    and the melodly in a song,
    is the rhythm in a flow.
    vines so deeply woven,
    that veins can't get blood through.
    i think of this every time,
    that i think i love you.
    not quite sure,
    but sure of one thing.
    and that's what i'm saying,
    is what i really mean.
    don't hate me for my truth,
    hate me because your wrong.
    and you can't harmonize,
    with my internal song.
    wind blows hints to you,
    but you cease to recognize.
    because i said,
    that you was fly.
    now i know why,
    you think i love you.
    and therefore,
    these things you do.
    head over heels,
    caught in my minds testimony's will.
    i thought loving you was real,
    but it was just an emotion i thought i could feel.
    :bye:
    oh well,
    move around.
    you were the shadow,
    to this hearts pound.
    you must have misunderstood,
    what i said.
    if you did then line 15,
    needs to be re-read.
    Descartes stated,
    "I think therefore I am."
    so if i know nothing,
    then no one but me--do i d***.
    i can't take down one person with me,
    because i don't want to be the only one.
    do unto others as you would have them do unto you,
    was what was said by the Son.
    i understand well,
    but you misunderstood.
    i kept trying to love,
    what i knew i never could.
    but don't feel bad,
    you see because.
    i'm still falling short myself,
    of understanding love.

    taken by surprise,
    yet mummified,
    can i catch a ride?
    caught my eye,
    ain't no lie,
    oh yeah--you's fly..........but you just passed by.

    my surprise was taken,
    because my mummifiedness wasn't shaken,
    and the ride was still in the makin.
    my poor eye,
    was sadly mistaken,
    i thought you were beef but you were bacon........ :tongue:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    meaty flow of creativity ver nice
     
  3. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    'preciate it RICH, i figured it was time for me to do something a little different, you know take a quick break from thought scribes........but i'll return, please believe me...........one love RICH, one love...........
     
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    tru dat indeed sis we all flip the script at times for a open vision
    do yo thang i be lovin it !
     
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    lol...thought you were beef...but you were bacon

    love the ending...
    Nice flow my sister
    understanding love
    is not a destination but
    a continuous journey...

    Much love my sista!
    Sage
     
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    I also really dig the ending, sistah. I mean, the whole piece is so dang tight. This is a different kinda poem for you, and I'm diggin the style and feelin the message. Peace and love, girl.
     
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    We have all seen another one way, only to see that they are actually something much different. I hear ya, and the title of this was cleverly appropriate.
     
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    Hey...

    Sis i like this one, it was cute. Yeah of course i'd love a nice steak compared to a piece of bacon, lol. Nice write.
     
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