Poetry Critiques : Poor Poet

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  1. Mario D King

    Mario D King Active Member MEMBER

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    This is a Poem I wrote back in 2001 while in college...


    Poor Poet
    The poet awaits in his chair for his
    second coming thought.
    He's at a mental block, in the past is
    where he's caught.

    The pressures of the world is swarming
    all around.
    In a dark room with a cigar is where the
    poet can be found.

    All the poet need is a pen and a pad,
    to illustarte the shortcomings of life from
    which he had.

    Poetry is the only way the poet expresses
    himself.
    He's intoxicated with pain trying to make
    that leap for help.

    The poet gazes out his window that has
    no blinds.
    Looking at the stars for peace is what he
    finds.

    His soul has risen making him rich on the
    inside.
    With his poor surroundings not altering his
    pride.

    The relationship with God and the poet
    has gotten better.
    But he's still battling between pass sins
    that follow where ever.

    Puff, puff...goes the poet on his everlasting
    cigar.
    Too poor for an ashtray so he puts his
    ashes in a jar.

    Bills, rent, notes and creditors is what
    the poet has to pay.
    With no money for school, he uses his pen
    to keep astray.

    With all the worries in the world the poet
    maintains to stay sane.
    Even though when he writes... it shows
    nothing but pain.

    The poet may never see diamonds or
    pearls.
    All the poet wants to do is share his gift
    to the world.

    Mario D King
     
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    Great piece well scribe
     
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    You have captured the very soul of a poet, and in so doing revealed the poet in you.
     
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