Black Poetry : Ponderings

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  1. LyrikalShe

    LyrikalShe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    your words, they crept into my mind,
    around lost hopes, they intertwined.
    you bind my heart with spider's lace,
    love--shall i ne'er behold your face?

    you stare at me with virtual eyes,
    the world around can hear my sighs.
    the image of you i do trace,
    love--shall i ne'er behold your face?

    your voice, with midnight serenades,
    my fantasies, it ever aids.
    shall we ever destroy the space,
    love--shall i ne'er behold your face?

    you've touched me without touch at all,
    there was nothing to do but fall.
    does your heart see mine in this place,
    love--shall i ne'er behold your face?

    c. 2002 Brandi N. Rainey
    All rights reserved
     
  2. Dream Weaver

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    Tell it to the one I love...I'm feeling this.


    I'm just sayin...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    so beautiful when we see wit our third eye
    feel ya motion when one touch without touching
    hits the mental mind and caresses.
    tyght scribe.
     
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    PloeMorphic Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice

    I am feelin' this piece, great job
     
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    Great piece. I'm lovin that first stanza.
    Keep scribin poet.

    *Emma*
     
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    Wow! I really liked this poem. You have a nice use of repitition. Usually I do not like the ryhme scheme you used but this time it was nice and refreshing!

    Congratulations and write more!

    The Vortex -Hotaru S.

    Christopher's Place
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh so very poetic Lyrikalshe.
    Very soft yet tangible loving
    feel to this!
    Write on, Poet!
     
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    yeah, that was very smooth and placid. i really liked the wording especially
    "you've touched me without touch at all,
    there was nothing to do but fall. "
    i know that feeling all too well. keep flowin' poet!
     
  9. cocobutterskyn

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    I'm sure many can relate.

    Very nice piece.


    souldeep!
    Coco
    :heart:
     
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    im diggin this....

    nice flow
     
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