Black Poetry : POETRY....OR Not???

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by afrostotle, May 27, 2004.

  1. afrostotle

    afrostotle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :teach: Poetry or Not???

    Before I get started I…
    Wish that I could say that… this piece
    Is going to be about something
    Beautiful…a beautiful image a…
    Serene release of… sonnets and roses
    A piece of… lyrical prose
    Where Man confesses and professes
    His… undying but certain Devotion of…
    Unwavering commitment with sensuous
    Soul-searching emotions
    A…poem with…nostalgic phrases
    Symbolizing the lows and highs
    The …Joys of life through… various Stages…
    Cherished memories for All ages…
    Most readers like those Kind…a lot…
    I wish I could say that this is that kind of piece…but…
    It’s not

    I…
    Wish this piece which… I am about to read
    Was filled with… sensational stories
    Of…Patriotic glory and… heroic deeds…
    Chronicles of brave travels sending me
    Across rough seas I… wish I could tell of
    Voyages to uninhabited lands with
    An abundance of treasures…Some
    Delightful desert oasis…My Nights filled with
    Guilty Pleasures… tall tales
    Too terrific to believe yet…too thrilling to be
    Forgotten…I…Wish this was that kind of Piece…but…
    It’s Not…

    Truth be told…
    This… piece I’m about to release
    On paper resembles a literary eye
    Sore… and brainwashed minds might
    Get glazed eyes and despise my rhymes and
    Label it a bore…because it lacks
    The traditional Preferred fluff and lofty
    Metaphors… and all the things poets
    Do to be clever…I do read those
    Sometimes…HOWEVER… when this
    “Prophet in chains” needs a release from
    Society’s pain and starts to squirm and
    Grow Anxious It’s… laymen’s terms and

    Plain language…that supplies the medicine
    Curing me of my symptoms of
    Mental anguish… No matter how
    Hard I try to get things going
    Still…I can’t just…Scribe merely
    For the sake of writing poems
    Full of tricky talk and …slick slogans
    Just for the sake of me having
    Something good to show them
    So- I- Write pieces of- wit and wisdom
    That Speak to my people…
    Arming them with… x-ray vision…
    So they can see through
    Camouflaged evil

    Then-
    I- hit- them- with- more-
    Pieces that… cures them of their drug
    Induced delusions of… a unified Multi-ethnic
    American inclusion…while exposing how
    King’s Dream- became- an- illusion of
    False prophecies and… defecto policies…
    The true “Politricks” of Demonic Democracies…
    These… Lyrical lessons of Blessings strengthens
    Young minds and…focuses the blurred line
    Between hip-hop and…hip -oc racy…
    To once again-be the voice of the oppressed
    Like It was first designed to be…
    Who…Me???

    When I release… Best believe it’s
    A mentoring piece… designed to rid
    My peeps of their grief and… provide
    Real-time relief from the sins found
    Within most urban city streets
    Exposing to them…
    An escape from hate and-
    Changing one’s fate- from a
    Life of strife and- giving them a Worth
    More than the price of gold at their
    Weight…Giving them and- us and- you
    And- ME…a… sense of how things need to be
    If “WE” are ever going to be …I said…
    A sense of… how things……need to be…
    If WE- R- EVER- GOING- 2- B- FREE- 2- JUST- B

    So…………
    Whenever my soul is…
    Filled with strain
    And the pain starts to use me
    I …sit patiently………Waiting
    For those Ancestral spirits to move me…
    Then- I-Afrostotle- Black Man- with-
    Pen in hand- scribe only the words that choose me
    And once wordz chosen are spoken- the-
    Rhetoric rendered slowly starts to sooth me…
    Now…Out of breath…I must stop…(SIGH)
    I wish I could have written some renaissance
    Classical piece….But… reality’s…All I got

    Peace, Power, and Prosperity

    Written by Afrostotle Turr`e
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome creativity poeticlly sprayed
    it's poetryyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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    i likes the way you posed this
    yes indeed its poetry
    nice one thanks for sharing it
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Thanks for the LOVE.....

    I got into an argument of sorts with a english "scholar" on campus, and he seems to feel that anything say pre-Harlem dayz...Other than Sir Langston, is the truest form of poetry...and spoke to and for more folk than today's more Loose style of writing..........One Love
     
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    Nothing wrong with flowing in real time, the fluff doesn't always give the right vibe. I loved the way you layed this down, if this isn't poetry, what is?
     
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    Well if that isn't poetry then what is????
    I like this piece. You Flow!!!!
     
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    This was very, very refreshing to me and I like the way you delivered it. thanks for sharing this with us.
     
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    reply to afrostotle

    Polemic poetry professes its innocents
    of providing presidents and patients with stimulants.
    Its lawyer breaths on an ignorant group of twelve
    Hands them shovels and tells them to dig facts and delve
    Into lies profound hidden within sound waves all around
    Unfortunately, twelve sheep enjoy eating arguments unsound!
    Jury comes back with verdict "polemic poetry is profound”


    Great poem from a poet's poet
     
  9. afrostotle

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    Peace, and Blessings Brotha....I dig what you are saying about the power of language, and how it servers others with a ill purpose...I guess I had a day where I was fed up with the verbal tap dance done...when I feel I have a battle that causes physical casualties waging on all around me...Sometimes pain is healed with plain speak....One Love
     
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    as I told a fellow poet recently....

    Reading this was like being baptized...in the Nile...

    Only you, Afrostotle....could have scribed such perfection :bowdown:
     
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