Black Poetry : Poetic Freedom

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PositiveMindset, Dec 30, 2003.

  1. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I gotta say what's on my mind...
    U don't like it?
    Fine...
    Don't want U 2...
    I do me, U do U.
    I'll script verses with insertions of curses...
    Talk about things that get me upset,
    I don't care who it's capable of hurtin'...
    Cuz it's freedom, poetic.

    If I wrote it, U know I sed it...
    I wrote it so I woudln't forget it...
    When life gets 2 hectic I go on a mental ride...
    Freein' all thoughts from my mind
    In the form of poetic scribe...
    Let the reader decide if they feel the vibe.
    If not, it's still all right...
    Opinions differ & they're still respected...
    That's the beauty of the freedom of the poetic.

    U can ride on the back of a lion in the savannah,
    runnin' your fingers thru his mane...
    U can live in a neighborhood where the neighbors aren't tryin' 2 do better
    than that family with that common last name...
    Race black rhinos around the rings of Saturn...
    Married couples sharing in the upbringing of their children
    is an unfaltering pattern.
    The blessing of mind over matter...
    It can shatter images of disaster faster than
    people who'd scatter when they saw Casper.

    It can bring love 2 a darkened heart....
    It can sing of the joys of embracing this smartened art.
    I pierce my mind with my pen whenever I write...
    I fiercely scribe pieces I believe has much insight...
    Key words are I believe...
    I don't care if people agree.
    If everyone had the same opinion about everything,
    we wouldn't be free, poetically...
    Like I sed, U do U, I'll do me...
    If U don't like what I write, then don't read.
    In my mind are troubling issues that have been deeply embedded...
    So I write about them cuz I have that freedom of the poetic.
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    dude...
    this was tighter den all heck...
    man i felt these...

    "Race black rhinos around the rings of Saturn...
    Married couples sharing in the upbringing of their children
    is an unfaltering pattern."

    supa phat
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    another on point scribe from da feelins inside
    let it run free
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    word em up! tight and on point, brotha Pos
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :jawdrop: Wow!! That was so powerful. I felt that. Yr words caught me @ go. just loving it.
     
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    Mawelulu1Luv Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All aboard tha Freedom Poertic Train...

    A Beautiful Passionate Liberating PEACE

    I Luvz this Scribe

    Write On!
     
  7. LeRoy

    LeRoy Active Member MEMBER

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    i got much love for this one.
    thats some real talk
    i'm feelin what your saying
    KEEP WRITING AND I'LL KEEP READING
     
  8. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks 4 the feel, fam.

    I just had 2 let this out, it's been on my mind 4 a while...

    Just a fair warning 2 those that read me, keep the mind open, cuz I might hit U with something U ain't feelin', but oh well...

    That's the freedom, overstand?

    One love.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now with that said...

    You ripped this...
    and left nothing but shreds of
    surface feeders...so allow me

    All Hail..."Power to the PositiveMindset"

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    Your writing inspires the poet in me...
     
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