Quiet Poetry Lounge : Poem:"Lastnight"

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  1. Rhyme4ReasonFBR

    Rhyme4ReasonFBR Active Member MEMBER

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    "Lastnight"

    lastnight she dove into me like naked skin into cool water
    left me breathless and free
    lastnight we learned things deeper than surfaces with extended attention paid to details
    and details were paid in full
    til I almost bust off the lustful aroma of possibilities
    and how the infinite was in reach when we closed our eyes and dared to dream
    I swore I tasted her kiss this morning when the first light touched me
    and when it was over I wanted it back...
    greedy was I
    but love, no judge would convict me

    lastnight I pictured what chocolate ice cream would look like
    taste like, its feel and touch dripping off inviting nipples
    I hope my dirty mind doesn't betray my trust
    I hope my smile and eyes hold their composure and not let my sip of wine know how thirsty I may be
    a dangerous thing she possesses, that kind of control of me
    but this thing is indescribeable, the air between us how could we possibly put words to
    if your body was a candle... every part of it..
    I want to take a flame to slowly...
    and bask in the painful heat of your wax dripping that fire on me
    when you're totally melted all over me, I only want to know that you felt me
    and your name would be written right there
    traces of your folicles caught up in my hair
    looking back our ****** up beds though separated by a journey
    it looks like you were right there
    hold up.. how can all this be just me?
    the promises that lingered in my ear
    and the nasty things you said to me

    the beautiful smile that escaped the moment that we hugged naked
    the fire consumed me
    burned away our costumes and daily facades
    because in the middle of the night we
    and after thirty minutes of rest we
    again
    it was just before dawn you hugged me and we
    just couldn't stop

    and that was the point
    when she dove into me
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    my brutha my brutha dis here lastnight dive
    that took u on a journey was awesome and tyteeeeeeeeee!!!!!!
    drop the feverish lava bruh !
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It comes a time when ...*whew* ..well when uncontrollabe :flame: start burning out of control...yes, it be's like that sometimes.
    Wonderful poem ...I like where you took this, thanks for dropping it
     
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    This was quite spicy, for sure, but it also conveyed deep passion and care. This flow was raging, brotha. Flow some more poet.
     
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    Last Night

    That poem was off the meter!!! Had me choking just reading it aloud. Nice!!!!!
     
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    I couldn't take my eyes off of the screen. That was beautiful and sensual in everyway imaginable. Something I can listen to when with the significant other!
     
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    wow ...


    now did we dove into this poem... :swim:




    :welldone: poet..














    Lovelibertylady:heart:
     
  8. BrownEyed Girly

    BrownEyed Girly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was soooo beautiful. I know it's been on the sight for a minute, and i'm just now reading it but i had to read it twice, it was just that wonderful.
     
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