Black Poetry : Poem In The Key Of Pain

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I lie

    horizontal, no
    prostrate ~ more to the condition
    of my position~
    in a posture of complete
    surrender to this agony

    that rips gaping holes
    in the fabric of
    who I be

    arms outstretched
    upward
    outward
    to ward
    the emptiness
    that engulfs

    no, that
    strangles,

    more to the true
    nature,

    THAT SUFFOCATES
    my being

    you are not
    yet you are
    you feel near

    but you be far

    cold,
    no ~
    chilling
    to the bone
    this being
    alone

    hurt can't
    begin to
    comprehend
    this state
    of nothingness

    in the absence
    of you and
    your caress

    tears
    refuse to fall
    frozen in their
    place

    not a stain will
    dry
    upon my face

    stubborn, my
    anguish
    will not cry out

    WHY?

    YOUR EARS WON'T
    HEAR ME IF I SHOUT!


    your name
    lies quietly
    in my heart

    I embrace
    this pain
    while we're
    apart ...


    Alyce, 2000
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ummmmm hummmmm!!! Alyce i know this one right
    but the doors will swing open ......he be coming home

    flow on sistah A.:kiss:
     
  3. Mr marion

    Mr marion Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awesome

    I N joyed this a lot. Not always easy to walk away when you want to stay. Love has many faces..
     
  4. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyccceeee.


    oh my ****, Sis!!

    in your usual perfectly poetic fashion, you
    managed to add a whole new dimension to
    "i'm missin' you".

    write one Poet... write on! :)

    OneLuv.
    SunShyne~
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I cant

    express how tight this was with out being profane...lol I was like sittin on the edge of ya pen waiting for the next drop of ink to hit the page! I cant pick a favorite part ma....

    Simply Brilliant!
    Reas
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    after I closed my mouth, I read this again and thought to myself Ms. A, has blessed this house once again with the wisdom of her skilled pen.



    Bravo
     
  7. JNubian

    JNubian Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms. A, and to this I add: Love Leaves

    Love leaves
    Heart aches
    In it's wake

    Love goes
    Who knows
    How to end

    A pain so real
    That you feel
    You'll love no more

    Love flees
    Takes with it
    Part of your dreams

    Love leaves
    No love again
    No love
    No more

    Love leaves
    Walks right out
    You close the door

    You cry a little
    You cry a lot
    But tears won't bring

    Love back to you

    No not that love

    It's gone

    The End.


    JNubian/1998
     
  8. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whew, chile!

    JNubian, sis.....what a blast from the past, reading this...but MORE to the POYNT....I THO ROUGH LY LUV your piece!!!!!!!!!!! I'm feeling it....experiencing it again, through your expressions....seeing it...hearing it, touching it, tasting it....the schtuff be the best bittersweet madness on the planet!

    Thank you for sharing your heart!

    a
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AND YOU TAKE MY BREATHAWAY!!!!!!

    READ LOVER'S LAMENTATION, BY YOURS TRULY I FEEL YOU MY SISTA, THE DEEPER THE DIGGIN THE BETTER THE HEALIN! PEACE AND PROSPERITY!
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deep...alyce, gurl, i'm really lovin' this piece, mos def.
     
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