Quiet Poetry Lounge : Poem:"Hush in the Garden: Shut the Fukk UP and LIsten"

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  1. Rhyme4ReasonFBR

    Rhyme4ReasonFBR Active Member MEMBER

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    "Hush In the Garden: Shut the Fukk Up and Listen"

    Shhh in the garden
    in other words my baby wanted me to shut the fukk up and listen
    Hushed in the garden a time for grown men to sit up like a child and
    pay attention.
    Who ever learned anything from talking?
    Shhh
    listen...
    then she told me about the days I went astray
    instead of coming straight home from work
    fukk if the game was on today
    I should've never left my baby alone
    She let me know that my friends are just that
    but on Valentine's Day we owns that kitty cat?
    and I added "baby you're so damned right about that"
    Shhh
    hush in the garden
    shut the fukk up and listen

    and so I did
    she said there's a plan for both of us
    because in God we will always trust
    and just like neither one of us has to worry about if's
    if nothing because nothing like if will ever happen
    it's just sometimes she felt I need to calm down
    calmate she says to me
    something about the summer time when the young girls come around
    come out relaxed and got freight trains running off they tracks
    and men we sometimes forget to we grown
    gone crazy over some hazel contacts
    swallow that pride in the rock
    soften a little and come from in front of the mirror
    and thats when
    shhh in the garden
    and so I did
    I listened
    She said what happened to the flowers for no reason
    and the kisses that happend spontaneous, didn't need a season
    What happened to her focused attention
    remembered the promises I cried the first night we made love
    she don't want that attention deficit disorder applied to her love
    she deserved that kind that came straight from up above
    and she won't settle
    Neither will I in my reply

    shhh
    hush in the garden
    shut the fukk up and listen

    She didn't come at me wrong to shrink my manhood to
    light a fire under my *** and hold my heart in a glass display
    she pulled her grown child to the side and let him know
    he can't **** up this way
    and I respect that
    when my baby had something to say

    Hush in the garden
    I had to calm down
    shut the **** up and listen
    and that's love
     
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    word !!!!!!!!!!
    I hear ya .......tyte drop
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *Applause*

    ...Very, very nice...

    but even more "profound"....

    *Snaps*
    Sage...


    .........ain't nothin sweeter than some good ole fashioned "Communication" :bball:
     
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    And it takes a person who is intuned to their significant other to know when they need to just shut up and listen. And the way you flowed with this, makes us all hush and pay attention. Keep the flows coming.
     
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    this was tight like how you laid this...flow head on POET
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh no...did you cuss? :bam: ...oh my bad, I forgot you can get that off in poetry.

    This was/is a awesome piece and I respect...that you respect, your higher power...your "Queen", that says a lot...shhhh
     
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    BrownEyed Girly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!!! This was incredible for real! I feel blessed to have read it
     
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    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree with everyone els in the family. This was beautiful.
     
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