Black Poetry : plum wine @ prime time...4 laurie jones

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she fluffed the pillows
    in her uneasy chair
    poured herself a glass of
    plum wine

    heaved a sigh
    and dropped her body
    down into a catatonic slump....

    the day before the hump

    was the worst day in modern history
    (& she coulda sworn yesterday was a stone *****)

    and now it don't look like
    the night's gonna end

    the people walk in darkness

    and, before the debris and the soot, it was
    ignorance that obscured the light

    (and that schitt wasn't even right)

    her head was splitting
    back sore
    feet all swole
    she could feel the beginnings
    of a scream welling inside
    her throat

    didn't want that sour
    taste back up in her mouth
    again...

    so she took a sip and as the
    warm, sweet poison burned her
    belly, she bit her lip

    and the TV droned on; watching
    her struggle with the anger,
    hurt, the fear,

    those grim messages fed
    her throbbing dread

    "is the world really coming to an end?"

    "shole is baby, and we gonna see
    signs and wonders chile...terrible
    signs and wonders"...

    so she took another taste
    of sweet plum wine
    waiting for the glaze to coat
    her eyes and numb her mind...


    Alyce, (c) 2001
     
  2. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what I absolutely love about this piece is the singularity of the message. So much of our impressions of these past few days events have been based on our reactions to the media reports that have bombarded our television screen...

    In the midst of all of this..there she sits...slumped over in her not so easy chair...sipping her plum wine and weighing the flavours of it....the bitter tastes of life on the tip of her tongue

    Her thoughts..this reality...she wants to dull the nonsense of it...with the liquor...she is powerless to change the changes...except to pour herself another sip...of plum wine

    I really love this one A!!

    *cheers*

    :toast:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sistah Alyce

    this takes minds back in tyme as we
    watch in wonderment
    : is it the end of da world
    has life become us to a bitter taste
    as she sip her plum wine
    gurl u done it with this one fo sho!!
     
  4. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa this was nice. i'm one with Hunter on this one.
     
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    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Well done

    :jumping: very well done !
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can I please bow to you right now?
    pretty please....................?
    You know this here was to much like
    write.

    blak
     
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