Quiet Poetry Lounge : Please Shine(inspired by Floetry some kinda way)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SensualReality, Apr 30, 2004.

  1. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If I was a bird
    what the possibilities would bring
    I'd see all there is to see and can be heard
    While I sing
    If I was a bird I'd spread my wings and fly away
    To stop the stress and drama that weighs me down everyday
    Too young for what I see and what's constantly bombarding me
    My tears fall slowly and sting intensly
    Eyes sag when I weep for what seems an eternity
    I never cry when a soul dies,but in my mind I hear silent cries
    "Maybe they're in a better place,so wipe those tears from your face."
    Everynight I pray and ask God to never let me fall from grace
    When I'm going too fast or too slow try to keep a steady pace
    Tired of these people relying on me to be their strong force
    Away from this drama I need a divorce
    No one is perfect and looking around I see that's common
    For a person to believe they're God's gift to the world
    Need to hear that speech a profound word
    Try to be set apart from all this rain
    Lifting my head up and look the pain in the face with no strain
    If I could curse I would
    Curse with such a horrible force I could
    The devil told me I should
    Go off like a fire inside the wood
    But I held myself back kept it all intact
    My brain's throbbing and my eyes are puffy
    I need to break away from this atmosphere the air is stuffy
    Now the clouds spread apart to reveal my beautiful sunshine
    "....if you take away my rainbow I will cry,I'll cry..."
    My mind is away from my body right now as I pause
    Thinking about this is it really worthless?
    Then I hear a voice above as it calls
    "My beloved you are free."
    Watch me as I spread my wings.
    :wave:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    spread'em and fly high
    enjoy the wind sweep
    this was sweet flow on
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx rich :thanks:
     
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    This was a beautiful flow...16....wow.
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :lol:Watz Aaliyah said it,"age ain't nothin' but a numba'" :wink: Thank you
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She did? Well, I don't agree with that, there's much to learn in the years ahead. But, my point is, you are already a fantastic poet, and you can only get better.
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you:D
     
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    This is definitely one of your best yet, young poet. I really really like this. And I do feel for the youth of today, because y'all have to deal with so much more than we did when we were kids. Just hang in there and be strong. Bad times don't last, and your heart and mind will carry you through the darkness.

    Peace, baby.
     
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    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you gempis for the support and it is a lot out there,but there is a way to avoid it some teens just don't do it
    :wink:thanx :thanks: :toast: :rolling: :peace:
     
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