Black Poetry : Playtime in Autumn

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Do we dare?
    Do we dare take a dive
    in that colorful mound of leaves
    just set ourselves free and alive
    We look around our secluded New England
    bungalow, and figure, hey, why not?
    We grasp hands, take a running leap and
    landed upon those leaves like we were shot
    out of a cannon...What fun this is, just frolicking
    and giggling like kids, amid the crunching sound.
    Red, yellow, brown, with a hint of green, seemingly
    falling from the sky, what a simple joy we've found.
    As the sun sets, and the air gets cooler, we cease
    rolling around in the leaves, and snuggle and spoon.
    Do we dare?
    Do we dare allow child's play to mature into adult play
    as we become hypnotized under the light of the moon?
    It is of no use, we've become lost in each other, causing
    hands to roam and rediscover soft and delicate places
    longing to be touched. Clothes are discarded amongst the
    fall foliage, and a blissful trance is written all over our faces.
    The leaves continue to crunch, as we roll, slowly this time...
    Red, yellow, brown, with a hint of green, cascade
    down upon our bodies, tickling our skin.
    Oblivious to the chill in the air, the warmth between us makes
    us forget the chill of the night air we're breathlessly taking in,
    as moans harmonize with the rustling of the underbrush.
    Except for the sound of our breathing, all is quiet now.
    And we delight in the calm of nature's peaceful hush.
     
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    drifting minds in the silent of hush ....very nice flow watz
     
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    Minds can easily fantasize, when they are allowed to drift. Thank you brotha Rich.
     
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    For a brief moment...I laid in those leaves, wanting never to leave...this piece took me there, and for anothe moment...I stayed there,
    thanks watz, how badly I needed that "One" moment...to mingle with those beautiful, colorful...yet cozy leaves.
    that read like a heavenly drop, ^5
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How much I appreciate you telling me that my words took you there queent, for I needed that moment myself. Glad you enjoyed sista, you certainly made me smile, thank you.
     
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    enjoyed the vision you created here nice poem....

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    "as we delight in the calm of natures peaceful hush"
    "do we dare"

    you dared...yes you did..aand such wonderful lines, just like the one I quoted...yes dare....you did very nicely
     
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    I ask myself, if I read this piece again...would I be allowed another one of those beautiful "ONE MOMENTS" that I clung to when I first read it...I smiled so wide, it turned into a laugh...cause that ONE MOMENT...compeled me too again seek that moment of calmness, heavenly, comfort.
    this piece really made my day when I first read it, a calming read.
    thanks again
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you enjoyed the vision Mzblkangel, thank you.
    Deepy, happy that you enjoyed those lines, appreciated sis.
    Queent, you humble me. If this piece could at all make your day, then I must be doing something right, thanks again sista.
     
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    You portray life wonderfully! :great:
     
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