Black Poetry : Played out

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by phenomenalwoman, Feb 15, 2004.

  1. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Playa the act is over
    I’ve got you figured out
    Your smile
    A trail of lies from beginning to end
    Your tears
    Pages from my favorite book of jokes…I laugh
    Your words
    Bother like sitting on nails…a pain in my @ss
    Your suicide threats
    Candy…tastes good in my mouth
    Why don’t you do it…end it
    After all life’s a b**ch and then you die
    Your reality
    Salty… a bag of pretzels I munch on
    Your promises
    A shattered mirror…broken
    Your conversation
    Redundant a cd playing the same old song
    Your existence
    A dirty diaper…full of ish, disposable
    You...
    Played out
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You really threw down some penetrating images with this one. Although this line made me chuckle: Your words
    Bother like sitting on nails…a pain in my @ss....I get how you can just get plain tired of someone eventually.
     
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    cojamalik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Expressed beautifully. I feel ya!
     
  4. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :eek:hmy: ........ Loving this to the extreme.... My fav. line........ 'Played out'
     
  5. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The images you painted were on point. And if the playa don't know,n now he knows! Nice piece queen

    blak
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    most def lovin the imagery in this piece, girl. and the whole thing is crisp and just so on. you know, as I was readin I got this vision of you and 1poetsought doin a collab. just a thought.
     
  7. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks all ppreciate it...
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh, how I love your work......this was very visual.....I could just see everything with my own eyes......this was truly a work of art.....much love sista for bring the heat.
     
  9. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks foxi i am glad you were able to get a visual while reading this...you feedback is much appreciated
     
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    lolol...this was funny...
    some catz have a difficult time being real...
    nice piece
    one love
    khasm
     
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