Quiet Poetry Lounge : Pinocchio, revisited

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Sep 26, 2002.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this version with a twist, is dedicated, with great love, affection (and concern), to all "Pinocchios" and "real live boys", everywhere. :heart:


    one quiet night...
    he escaped from gipetto's shop
    in search of adventure

    the whole wide world
    looked so new...exciting
    inviting him at every corner
    to wander the darkened alleys
    and slip almost anonymously
    into rooms with trap doors
    and cryptic addresses where real
    people hid behind clever masks

    he engaged in fantasies and
    dreamlike pleasures he'd never
    known... and with every
    encounter they highly praised him
    for how long he'd grown

    but he never soul~ touched
    and he couldn't cry
    couldn't feel the pain
    of a hurtful lie

    his little wooden heart
    continued to roam
    from site to site
    night after night

    he found it safer
    just being a toy
    instead of becoming
    a real live boy


    alyce (c) 2002
     
  2. Bert

    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I could not

    pass this one by...

    brilliant twist. And poor Pinocchio will never know the multiple advantages of becoming a "real live boy".

    Bert
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ditto BRILLIANT. Sometime you just have to acknowledge that nothing can replace raw talent. Go hed!

    be
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    super twist in vibe sistah A.
    surely from carved da feelings he could have
    very nice piece.
     
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    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    MMMM A wonderful play on an interesting idea. :) And I agree really BRILLIANTLY done. We can only hope that there is a Blue Fairy.com somewhere around.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I truely loved dis had to read again & again !
     
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    nice.

    p.a.,
    b.
     
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