Black Poetry : Perfection

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Jan 10, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kissing you is like running through candyland
    the taste of your sweetness done gave me cavaties
    Your eyes are like stars the way they twinkle @ me
    when we're doing our sexual activities
    Ive been wearing a stray jacket ever since you crossed my path
    because the touch of your fingertips drives me to insanity
    Your smile and body creates damages
    Im still recovering from last night's calamity

    Your beauty runs deeper than oceans
    Im like your personal diver- the deeper I get, the more oxygen I need
    Your like my daily source of air
    when your gone, it gets harder for me to breathe
    Your like the rose that grew from the concrete
    without water, sunlight, nor seeds
    Without you I'd be like a tree in October
    Id be alone and bare without leaves

    Although loving you is like a rollercoaster ride
    I dont mind the ups, downs, and twirls
    Because I know Im not perfect, lovin me is like a tornado
    I cause a lot of damage at the wrong time and send your emotions in swirls
    But I find reward in you womanhood
    I dont find nothing but drama when I deal with these girls
    And even though at times our boat sinks
    I always find treasure at the bottom, so I value your pearls

    Your name sits in the definition of perfection in my dictionary.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was beautiful
    i love the scribe of feelings dis leave
    to a heart of pure love flow on poet
     
  3. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    girl this made me smile. perfect twist of humor mixed in with some dope @ss lines. hee hee, flow on, ya love thang....
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ya pen hot
    likes this flow
    it was posed well
    Peace Angel
     
  5. AfroBoricuaRoni

    AfroBoricuaRoni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    pure tightness

    this poem was truely a tight one. props to you for this one.


    Roni
     
  6. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was real nice.........
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree with gempis, just the right mixture of descriptive prose and laughter...^5.
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall

    im glad i can make ya laugh. much love n respect...
     
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    NICE DROP POET!

    This was like...wriggling my toes at the edge of the pool of some tropical place on a hot summer day...REFRESHING!

    BLESSINGS ON YOUR HOUSE!
     
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