Black Poetry : Perfection

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  1. serenti-poet

    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If when you pass

    you take a glance

    Because I'm perfect as can be

    Please wait a sec

    And take a look

    And notice the real me.


    I've got the sense of style

    The brains, and all the friends,

    Perfect her, beautiful eyes,

    and def. no split ends.


    If you think I'm perfect

    Take a trip deep inside my mind

    Feel the shock and sadness from all

    the secrets that you find.


    Did you see my sister?

    With whom I always fight.

    Did you meet my lover?

    Who hits with all his might.



    Do you see the boyfriend?

    The one I never had.

    And did you hear the voices,

    that live inside my head?


    Did you follow me home?

    Or to work the whole day?

    Did meet my "friends"

    And hear the things they say?


    So next time you think I'm perfect

    With my big house and picket fence

    Please remmeber that special trip

    and the places that you went.


    :thanks: for reading my poem :)
     
  2. sarcasm4eva

    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    heeeeeeey gurlllllll im really feelin that poem.very tyte. much love serenti :)
     
  3. PurpleMoons

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    Your gift just takes my breath away! Indeed its tyte!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yesssssssssssssssssss!!!!!!
    i felt it through me deeply
    i saw the vision ......u flowin' tyte scribe here
     
  5. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love your flow :) I always do
     
  6. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Serenti, :wave:

    Very deep and emotional poem. I feel you all the way on this one!! A very well written piece. Great flow!!

    ~Sierra~ :toast:
     
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    cypher Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this trip inside your mind is where i long to find
    the passions of your heart where the beauty of your words had their start, a perfect u indeed is what this world needs...justdou
    :wave: :luvv: :luvv: :wave:
     
  8. serenti-poet

    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sarcasm---thanks girl for feelin my vibe caught in the moment by all that superfacial bull

    purple---thanks girl glad you liked it

    RICH---thanks for the copliment means alot to me

    Swt T---love the pic :) surry I ddin't help you in time thanks for the response tho means alot :)

    Sierra---I'm smiling so wide now thank you girl

    cypher---thank you for that I found alot out of those few words :)
     
  9. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is sooooooo beautiful and deep :)......i'm lovin' it :)
     
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    Royal_T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    U SAY, THANKS FOR READING MY POEM.
    I SAY, THANKS FOR WRITING YOUR POEM.

    IT WAS INDEED TYTE!!!
     
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