Quiet Poetry Lounge : perfect

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  1. ghost_writer

    ghost_writer Member MEMBER

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    she is perfect... in every way

    that is to say that since i would never wanna change her...
    she is perfect... in every way

    i mean...
    she's so fine when she walks by
    she makes my heart AND my CD skip
    its as if the music was tryin to change the tempo
    to flow with the beat... in her hips
    i love the gloss on her lips
    the pep in her step when she moves
    the way she smiles while i make futile attempts to be smoothe

    i jus love to listen to her breath (deep breathe)
    as i run my fingers through her
    i love it when she leaves
    and her perfume seems to linger in the air
    its... intoxicating...
    she... intoxicates me...
    some would say that im drunk off her love
    but i like to think i'm jus... tipsy
    see, she makes me feel so much more than im meant to
    and what
    i'm tryin to say is that i'm into her
    and we can be som much more than we're meant to but...
    words...
    words just ain't enough
    words jus ain't enough to describe how i feel about her
    i've tried to live without her
    i cant lie...
    i'd rather die than not be around her
    now that i've found her
    i wanna hold her close,
    don't wanna let her go when my arms surround her
    and i'm certain, cause all my life i've been searchin
    and i've finally found her
    love... that is
    as kisses cloud my vision forgetin the last time i was scarred
    the last time love tripped me
    and i fell hard enough to break my heart
    past experiences keep me guessin
    depressin memories leave me in denial
    while i'm thinkin this can't be what it is
    if it's jus like what it was when it...
    wasn't love but...
    all that seems to pass as i remember the last time i held her close
    thinkin about how her assets make me hate to see her leave but
    love to see her go, you know
    she's the reason i hate to go to sleep
    she's so much better than my dreams
    it's like my dreams jus cant compete and...
    u just dont know what i mean
    it's like knowing how i feel but not knowing if she feels what i know
    its like
    she completes me, and i just
    hope i had her at hello
    i, had to say hello,
    its like love was knocking at my door
    and i was jus lookin through the peep hole
    like it was those witnesses for Jehovah
    but... shes righ up there next to God
    and so i treat her like my queen
    u know i thought she was the dope man
    cause i feel jus like a fein
    and between the times of bliss she brings
    and the times i cant seperate reality from dreams
    it seem that thats where we ly
    and still words...
    cant describe...
    her...

    perfect
     
  2. ghost_writer

    ghost_writer Member MEMBER

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    srry its soo long... it was fun to write... and it felt good to speak... thought u guys might like it


    peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    perfect beauty and a feeling so sweet a taste that's so good
    that very one ............she a goddess i like this joint ............
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to Destee ghost_writer

    I like it a lot. It wasn't long at all. It flows well and it stays on piont. Very creative and expressive flow. I know someone like that and she lingers long in my mind.

    u just dont know what i mean
    it's like knowing how i feel but not knowing if she feels what i know


    Because words aren't enough and 24 hours are not long enough. Everytime she leaves time stands between you and her and the arrival of the next day. Keep expressing it to her like you did in this piece.She does know. That is why she returns to let you complete yourself.
     
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