Black Poetry : pent up

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by gempis, Mar 23, 2005.

  1. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    pent up
    let me out
    I don't fit into these
    boxes anymore
    act the part when I
    don't feel like it
    all that energy doesn't
    just go away
    would it be so wrong to just
    honor the needs of the
    body and soul and
    not deny
    throw out the shoulds and
    just be
    a human being, is that so bad?
    one who can
    eat and sleep and
    accept love
    that monumental leap -
    I know you have it in you
    it's hidden behind the pride
    admit it: you have needs
    then there's trusting
    - that one's hidden behind the fear
    OK, so you haven't had a lot of
    reason to trust in people
    that doesn't mean you should just
    abandon the idea
    aren't you the one who's
    never given up?
    abdicate control
    let the wild out
    be the other side of yourself
    let your freedom ring
    give in
    let go
    it's a pressure cooker in here
    but I don't know if I can
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime it's what life is delt
    breaking out or in can be hard
    but many make it anyway.....
     
  3. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    the title brought me here gempis...
    really dynamic piece..
    sometimes i thought you were talking bout you
    and sometimes i thought their was another energy involved
    reflections of self...
    let it all hang out girl...
    to many people passing on..afraid/never have let it go..
    keep on preaching it...pushing it...out...
    let it go...(wow i'm finding in poem in this...thanks for that too)
    let it go..
    what's the sense of tensing up
    fencing up
    cocoon time is good while you
    metamorphosize..
    but in the end..release that tide
    become
    the beautiful
    butterfly
    (which you already undoubtly are..from your creative expressions)
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think many struggle with this, living, in so much as you're going through the day to day, but not really being true to who we truly are in life. Very expressive piece, and well penned. So, so good to read you again gempis.
     
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    An apt message, timely in its presentation.

    I love this, Gempis.
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$, thank you for the vote of faith, man.

    deepy, bless your heart for busting out with both verse and understanding. Your love and support means the world, sis. Thank you very much.

    watzinaname, I truly appreciate your undying support. Much love to you, girl - thank you.

    1poet, thanks for caring enough to urge me to write something. I love you for that, baby, plus your constant support.

    Thanks, fam.
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really like this piece, because it related to me in someways, yet it was personal, all based on thought. I really enjoyed it.
     
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    Let it all out
    Be you
    If it is love let it hang out
    If it is fear let it hang out
    If it is lack of faith because of lack of trust
    Peep out the box and begin to trust.
    I like this piece very much
    Makes me think about myself in some odd way
     
  9. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Prizefighter16, thanks for stoppin by and showin me love, baby. :D

    Intrepid, bless your heart for feeling me and supporting me. I really really appreciate that - thank you.
     
  10. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The trick of life...

    <floats in>

    is that in order to get the most of it, we must open ourselves up and relate/interact with others, but it is so hard to open up in a world where everyone prefers to mask themselves in deceptive preceptions of what they want others to see and so often lose themselves to an idea of self instead of just being self.
    Your piece asks that oh so common question...who are U really? At least in my mind.

    Really thought provoking.
    enjoyed the read

    peace&1luv


    <floats out>
     
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